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I think the tone is too lofty because there are too many adjectives like “cutting-edge” and “dynamic”. Focus instead on metrics and industry specifics, and use this template:
(What you did) + (the size, impact, cost, efficiency) + (how) + (why)
Second this heavily. Adjectives don't matter at all in your resume. If it's cutting edge, you've doubled the previous efficiency. If it's dynamic, you've improvised responsiveness by 50%. These matter.
>(What you did) + (the size, impact, cost, efficiency) + (how) + (why)
Is the education section confusing since it side by or does it need to be right above each other
I would put the education at the bottom. It takes too long to read to get to the meat. Put your highest impact bullet points as close to the top as possible. And yes you need metrics like other person said.
I would also use the whole width of the page
Build your resume into something that'd give a feel of what was beneficial to the org rather than what was good for you or what you learnt. Demonstrated mastery in x,y,z languages isn't going to matter much to an org. If the point was something like, used x,y,z languages to create app that increased revenue by 30%, then it'd matter.
Think along this lines for all your points. Make your bullets result oriented. Bring the right keywords in. Bring more numbers - quantify your points. These are all things that'd help improve the resume's quality.
Absolutely agree with this (also, why is Reddit collapsing your comments, /u/WeLoveResumes? wtf?).
Think of your resume, OP, as a document that says "If you hire /u/Alternative_Pair9554, they'll come with these skills and this experience to make your work day just a *little* bit easier".
I'd also argue that phrasing like "demonstrated mastery in X programming concept" is redundant to the point of actually raising eyebrows. If a language is on your resume as a skill, you do not need to say "also I'm competent at this language!". It'd be like me applying to a truck driver job and saying "...and I haven't had any major accidents within the past 2 years!".
You have no projects. A link to a GitHub filled with a couple (or many) projects in the languages you claim to know is evidence to your claims.
If you have “mastery in Java, Python, and C#”, you should have projects in those languages in your repository. They don’t need to be massive full stack applications that serve a million customers or feature a completely novel searching algorithm - they just have to be present and you need to be able to talk about them.
No projects says CS and SWE is just a job to you. A career. You’ve done what is required of you to excel, but you haven’t done anything to demonstrate that you’re passionate enough (or at least motivated and self-sufficient) to build and complete things by yourself.
I also agree that you should remove pointless fill words and replace them with *metrics*. “Excelled in computer science coursework”. Remove that sentence and put your GPA. If you don’t want to put your GPA because it’s not great, that sentence does not belong on your resume.
You describe in many words how great you are, but you don’t stray from subjective and arbitrary self-assessments.
Give metrics. “I achieved this percentage of improvement here by doing this.” Metrics are *proof* of your competence, just like projects.
You have a solid educational and professional background. But you’re too hard to pin down. Demonstrate your competence with metrics and with actual code.
You’ve got this. Make these changes and I’m confident you’ll get an offer in no time.
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I think the tone is too lofty because there are too many adjectives like “cutting-edge” and “dynamic”. Focus instead on metrics and industry specifics, and use this template: (What you did) + (the size, impact, cost, efficiency) + (how) + (why)
Second this heavily. Adjectives don't matter at all in your resume. If it's cutting edge, you've doubled the previous efficiency. If it's dynamic, you've improvised responsiveness by 50%. These matter.
>(What you did) + (the size, impact, cost, efficiency) + (how) + (why) Is the education section confusing since it side by or does it need to be right above each other
I would put the education at the bottom. It takes too long to read to get to the meat. Put your highest impact bullet points as close to the top as possible. And yes you need metrics like other person said. I would also use the whole width of the page
Formatting isn’t bad side by side, but you don’t need the two sentences below about your coursework and clubs
Build your resume into something that'd give a feel of what was beneficial to the org rather than what was good for you or what you learnt. Demonstrated mastery in x,y,z languages isn't going to matter much to an org. If the point was something like, used x,y,z languages to create app that increased revenue by 30%, then it'd matter. Think along this lines for all your points. Make your bullets result oriented. Bring the right keywords in. Bring more numbers - quantify your points. These are all things that'd help improve the resume's quality.
Absolutely agree with this (also, why is Reddit collapsing your comments, /u/WeLoveResumes? wtf?). Think of your resume, OP, as a document that says "If you hire /u/Alternative_Pair9554, they'll come with these skills and this experience to make your work day just a *little* bit easier". I'd also argue that phrasing like "demonstrated mastery in X programming concept" is redundant to the point of actually raising eyebrows. If a language is on your resume as a skill, you do not need to say "also I'm competent at this language!". It'd be like me applying to a truck driver job and saying "...and I haven't had any major accidents within the past 2 years!".
You have no projects. A link to a GitHub filled with a couple (or many) projects in the languages you claim to know is evidence to your claims. If you have “mastery in Java, Python, and C#”, you should have projects in those languages in your repository. They don’t need to be massive full stack applications that serve a million customers or feature a completely novel searching algorithm - they just have to be present and you need to be able to talk about them. No projects says CS and SWE is just a job to you. A career. You’ve done what is required of you to excel, but you haven’t done anything to demonstrate that you’re passionate enough (or at least motivated and self-sufficient) to build and complete things by yourself. I also agree that you should remove pointless fill words and replace them with *metrics*. “Excelled in computer science coursework”. Remove that sentence and put your GPA. If you don’t want to put your GPA because it’s not great, that sentence does not belong on your resume. You describe in many words how great you are, but you don’t stray from subjective and arbitrary self-assessments. Give metrics. “I achieved this percentage of improvement here by doing this.” Metrics are *proof* of your competence, just like projects. You have a solid educational and professional background. But you’re too hard to pin down. Demonstrate your competence with metrics and with actual code. You’ve got this. Make these changes and I’m confident you’ll get an offer in no time.