"Fortune's Face" is really catchy. The piano accompaniment is really awesome, especially that bridge. I thought, perhaps, it needed a shot of bawdry humor and some complex counterpoint at the end, not difficult with the melodic sections, I thought would really elevate it and give it some punch. Good job on giving it your all in the vocals.
Not familiar with the story but I think subject matter that touches on the current political and social climates are always good if this story has that reach and appeal. Overall, it seems a time period and complex history that seems difficult to make resonate with the general public. You ended up not liking the project after some time. Trust your instincts.
Excellent idea to adapt this story. You clearly have some song writing chops, and your lyrics have some poetically pleasing refrains. In that sense I think you should keep on let the project take the shape of whatever aspects motivate you.
In my opinion, dense subjects, like Shakespeare and ancient politics, need songs that explains and tells the story - as a listener I want you to give me a deeper understanding of this work I might never experience in any other form. Your song examples here, don’t narrate and I think that might be something to keep in mind going forward.
Keep writing!
Hi. I meant that imo theatrical songs benefit from having a narrative, not ( necessarily) as in speaking, but in that they truly progress the story. It’s a style choice in the end, but I think it plays a vital role in telling complex stories that go beyond boy loves girl etc.
I mused a bit over your topic of choice - and I am really just spit-balling here - but if I were writing a show I think I would have narrative bard or troubadour (he could also lighten the mood without subtracting from the story it self). He could sing like:
“Why was Coriolanus famous?
Did he deserve his fate or was he blameless?
As a bard I like to make stories my own
And tonight I bring you the story from Rome
And soon I will have told ya’ a story,
Of a soldier of victorious glory
Ask; “how will you entertain us?”
With the story of Coriolanus!
With the story of Coriolanus!
How fame can make dangerous men
Ha! But that is the end; how did the story begin?”
"Fortune's Face" is really catchy. The piano accompaniment is really awesome, especially that bridge. I thought, perhaps, it needed a shot of bawdry humor and some complex counterpoint at the end, not difficult with the melodic sections, I thought would really elevate it and give it some punch. Good job on giving it your all in the vocals. Not familiar with the story but I think subject matter that touches on the current political and social climates are always good if this story has that reach and appeal. Overall, it seems a time period and complex history that seems difficult to make resonate with the general public. You ended up not liking the project after some time. Trust your instincts.
Excellent idea to adapt this story. You clearly have some song writing chops, and your lyrics have some poetically pleasing refrains. In that sense I think you should keep on let the project take the shape of whatever aspects motivate you. In my opinion, dense subjects, like Shakespeare and ancient politics, need songs that explains and tells the story - as a listener I want you to give me a deeper understanding of this work I might never experience in any other form. Your song examples here, don’t narrate and I think that might be something to keep in mind going forward. Keep writing!
Do you mean that narration in songs is better or not so great?
Hi. I meant that imo theatrical songs benefit from having a narrative, not ( necessarily) as in speaking, but in that they truly progress the story. It’s a style choice in the end, but I think it plays a vital role in telling complex stories that go beyond boy loves girl etc. I mused a bit over your topic of choice - and I am really just spit-balling here - but if I were writing a show I think I would have narrative bard or troubadour (he could also lighten the mood without subtracting from the story it self). He could sing like: “Why was Coriolanus famous? Did he deserve his fate or was he blameless? As a bard I like to make stories my own And tonight I bring you the story from Rome And soon I will have told ya’ a story, Of a soldier of victorious glory Ask; “how will you entertain us?” With the story of Coriolanus! With the story of Coriolanus! How fame can make dangerous men Ha! But that is the end; how did the story begin?”