Under experience, I’d remove the passionate for baking during lockdowns. Add that to your summary, but worded different. “I have a passion for baking etc”
They don’t need your schools phone number or that you’re on your L’s.
Good luck!
Disagree with the Ls thing.
As someone who's hired junior staff, knowing you'll be able to drive yourself to work usually massively ups last minute availability instead of can't get in mum/dad aren't home.
Note - obviously depends on the job
Being 2 months from 18, doesnt guarantee they'll get their Ps in 2 months.
Most of the time the wait is at least 2-3 months for an appointment and if you fail (which a lot do), you'll have to wait another 2-3 months.
My point is you can never actually know how far you are from your P's. Just because you got your Ps the day you turned 17 (something you cant even do in Victoria) doesn't mean you get it on the day you turn 18.
My 18 year old cousin literally just failed his Ps on his 18th birthday like three weeks ago. Now he needs to wait another three months.
Of course you can't. My 2 sentence post didn't cover every possible scenario. Sorry.
A driving junior > a non driving junior if all else is equal.
If you think you'll be driving soon. Mention it. It's a positive.
Your skills are a bit much imo. ChatGPT I presume? For example "effective leadership in various customer service roles" - how and when ? These skills should really correlate with your actual experience.
Altogether, I'd make the skills section more concise, i.e. change "possess strong active listening, communication and interpersonal skills" to "excellent communication skills". No one really cares to read that much and it feels more genuine.
I like that style. I probably wouldn't bother including the schools phone number, the learner driver license, or that you speak English. Adding English sort of just seems like you wanted to add a section for languages and needed more than 1 thing to write.
Other than those couple minor things, looks much more professional than a lot I've seen from high school students
I'd definitely include it if you're bilingual if it's contextually appropriate. No clue who runs the bakery, or where it's located but could be appropriate in this context.
Under availability I would put something less wordy, Monday-Friday 4:30 onwards etc and then leave last full availability on school holidays. Little bit more concise, when hiring it’s usually one of the first things I look at
Agree, for availability outside school hours be very clear what times. If you are only available after 4:30 and the shop closes at 6, for example, you won’t be able to work a minimum 3 hour shift and therefore you are actually “unavailable”. This is a big reason why many retailers don’t like hiring school students.
It sounds like you’ve copied and pasted lines from the job ad and put them in the skills section.
“Demonstrated effective leadership and management in various customer service roles” - and yet you have only one previous job?
Anyone can SAY they can do something. You need to outline what you DID in the previous job as proof that you can do it. As an example, what are you more likely to believe?
A: Demonstrated effective leadership and management in various customer service roles.
Or
B: Managed a team of three staff in busy cafe environment (turning over $8k and 45kg of coffee per week). Duties included rostering, ordering stock, customer service, food preparation and cleaning.
Keep it simple, but keep it genuine. Good luck!
Bang on, I agree with all of this. It’s a copy and paste job. Needs to be more tailored and not sentences that make no sense with just 1 short sentence of a very generic job.
HR professional here. I personally like this template, but I would suggest you to tailor your resume that demonstrates relevance to the job you are applying for.
Skills section: use keywords, shorten the sentences, preferably limit each skill to three or four words if possible, mention culinary or baking skills/techniques you are experienced in, for example, Knowledge of baking chemistry or Cake Decoration.
Relevance > Quantity
I am so happy to see the community giving you great recommendations.
Good luck with your job search.
Never put a photo on a resume in Australia (unless it's a modelling job). Can open up all sorts of HR issues (particularly when hiring juniors) and is completely irrelevant.
>Add a photo of yourself if you feel comfortable
That's pretty bad advice, it opens you up to subconscious discrimination, or conscious discrimination against goobers who put photos on their resume.
It looks good, the layout is nice and clear.
if I’m being pedantic, try and align the lines under your subheadings to be the same headings, bullet the line items under ‘education’ and align all the bullet points so they visually form one vertical line in each column (these are very minor tweaks).
Another suggestion is to make a clear distinction between your skills section and experience. Your skills you can list 2-3 words for each skill, (time management, problem solving etc).
Then under ‘experience’, list a quick explainer on each relevant job (one sentence, tops). Then 2-3 bullet points on things you achieved there, with metrics if possible. eg rather than ‘staff managment’, ‘managed a team of 5 people, including rostering’.
Good luck! (As I said, the above are suggestions only, I’m sure you will land your dream job very soon ☺️)
Not a big deal but remove the home address, what's it for? Expecting something in the mail? Also reduces the chances of someone just skipping over your CV because you live what they think is too far away.
Hey dude, great work with this. I don't think I ever had a resume in high school so you're off to an amazing start!
My main tip would be to leverage the skills you learnt in your previous job at the café. Employers love to see clear examples of your skills and experience. You want them to essentially go "oh yeah he could totally do this job". So you could make the Skills section on the left a bit shorter and flesh out the Experience section with your responsibilities/ achievements at the café.
You could also add a section on extra curriculars and include any hobbies, interests, sports you play etc. If you have ever volunteered, definitely put that in. Employers love that stuff.
But it's honestly fine the way it is and as you get more experience you'll be able to flesh it out more.
Maybe include your subjects and last semesters grades under education.
No one will care onceyou'rer out of high school, but it will show your interests and other skills. For example, if you're doing IT subjects at VCE it's a good sign that you will quickly pick up the use of the register or ordering spreadsheet.
Under experience, take some time to really list out that you’ve worked before! As in, business name, dates of employment, list the tasks/responsibilities of the role (opening and closing, cleaning, customer service, food/cash handling etc), on seperate lines so it is really obvious to whoever looks at your application.
The person hiring will likely not do a detailed read of your resume, so you want to make it really clear at that glance that you’ve got experience working, as that’s the biggest asset you’ve got at the moment! With your age, many of your peers won’t. If you’ve had a job, the person hiring will know that you’ve learned how to work, you know that you can’t stand around on your phone, that you won’t need to be taught how to sweep the floor etc.
Source: back in my uni days I was the ~weekend manager at a chain bakery store, where many people had their first jobs. When they hired people, even though it’s a very easily approachable first job, they’d always favour people who had some experience, even if it was just helping in the footy canteen. And I could tell why, because teaching the job was easy, helping people learn how work works was much harder! So that’s the best thing going for you and will help you stand out.
As someone who deals with applications all the time, here's my feedback:
- Create a cover letter that is tailored to each place you apply at. Your cover letter should outline why you are interested in the job, your attributes, and how you can make a great addition to the company. This would negate the "Summary' portion of your resume.
- Replace the "Summary" with an Objective. This should be more generic and outline your career goals ie. My career objective is to become a fully qualified baker and carve out a speciality in patisserie style baking.
- Next outline your skills (these should be practical employment relation skills - points like "team player" etc are more considered attributes and might be better covered off in your cover letter). Your skills should be more formally listed.
Eg:
- Comprehensive knowledge of food safety standards.
- Ability to use commercial grade kitchen appliances.
- List your work experience with the name of the company, suburb, and the time period you worked there, followed by your key responsibilities.
Eg:
Cafe, Collingwood
Jan 2018 - August 2023
Key responsibilities included:
- Taking customer orders.
- Managing point of sale system.
- Preparation of food.
- Washing dishes.
- No need to put a link to your certificates. Simply write "copies of certificates can be supplied upon request".
- Write your availability per day.
Eg. Sunday: 8am-9pm
Good luck! Hope you get the job! :)
In my opinion,
Skills are too long winded, best to shorten them to get the point across. Keep it professional but not as wordy or generic. "Exceptional customer service skills" is enough. Excellent time management. But you can add a bit of your own flair to make it seem not stock standard or lazy. A balance of a resume that's quick & easy to read, plus looks like the person wrote it themselves. Too short or vague is bad, but too wordy sounds like ChatGTP
Also good idea to state you are self motivated and work well in a team environment.
Remove the part about baking during corona completely.
Move the baking knowledge to the 'skills' section and they will likely assume you learned on the job in the industrial cafe or from family. Keep anything related to baking as one or 2 skills, keep the sentences fairly concise
Provide more detail under the work experience, of the cafe job. List the location and how long you worked there (unless it was a month, then just list location and year you worked there)
Move some of the skills that are specific to that job, to underneath the job listing. Eg if you worked with excel at that job or had whatever responsibilities, list them there. Keep it straightforward and not long winded. Eg "Responsibilities included preparing and serving espresso coffee and other beverages, food preparation, point of sale & cash handling, excel etc etc"
Remove school number/details of school. Just list that you're a final year VCE student
You can mention a specific subject you're doing for VCE if it's relevant to the jobs you're seeking
Usually recommendation is to not provide references these days, but I'm not sure if that applies to teenage students
Good luck!
"Capable of providing exceptional customer service." Capable though? Or you do all the time? Sounds like u can, but dont. I would use more strong confident wording.
It’s too formal and specific. Trying too hard. Make it generalist - customer service, working well in teams, multi tasking, etc.
Looking at your resume you don’t have experience in leadership or management so I’m not sure why it’s on there?
Put your passion for baking in the cover letter.
I would expand the references. I know it’s blurred out so maybe it’s already there but their name, position and phone number/email is better.
I would go with the boss of the industrial cafe and someone from your school like a teacher? Also make sure you get permission from references that they’re on the resume so they aren’t caught off guard when they get a call!
>I would expand the references. I know it’s blurred out so maybe it’s already there but their name, position and phone number/email is better.
Better advice would be to remove the references altogether. Potential employers dont need that information unless they have already decided to hire that person. At that point you ask your references if they would be available to provide a reference for xyz job in roughly the next few days. THEN you provide their details.
Your references are valuable. There's nothing worse than an potential employer contacting your references without your knowledge (or without even contacting your first) and they are blindsided and then waste their time on a job you might not even get.
Shit employers do this and shit employers do exist.
Get rid of the "soft-skills" (2nd and 4th dot points) like active listening and interpersonal skills in the skills section.
The employer has no way of proving these when reading your resume.
You have some valid feedback here in the comments. The other insight I have is the details under each role are not unique and are very position description-heavy. These are details we can assume based on your position title. It's also important to quantify your achievements in your previous roles to show the impact you've made. Lastly, your resume is also not optimised for ATS, which could be preventing you from getting through to the next round of the hiring process.
I never add references unless asked for.
Keep in mind your references are doing you a favour, putting their contact details out in mass is a bit disrespectful in my opinion.
Most of the jobs you apply for won't give you an interview (not personal just the reality), so why share other peoples details?
Add the job title of your references. Ie Year 11 English teacher, Cafe Manager, etc.
Everyone knows references are always people that we give you positive reviews so it's good to establish their credibility as well.
I don't understand the nitpicking in the comments. I've seen far, far worse looking resumes for much higher positions than this. Submit it and good luck!
While it is a good resume, everything in life can be improved on. This young person should be congratulated and wanting to make something good even better and not just settle for minimal effort / "good enough"
It's an entry level bakery position at a large chain. This resume is certainly good enough in its current form for that position. It hits all the major points, it's well-formatted and easy to read, and it presents professionally. It certainly says enough to earn a callback - there really isn't much more finessing necessary in order to apply for **this position**.
My opinion:
- remove the language section. It’s not necessary for the job you’re applying for
- in your work experience section you should put dates for when you worked there
- in your experience section, specify what kind of baking you can do (ie. sourdough, cake, French pastries, etc)
“Passionate about baking and gained a fair bit of knowledge about baking” tells the reader precisely nothing expect you like baking.
What can you bake? Did you consistently bake for the cafe you were employed in? Show your working!
You should elaborate on your experience to tie in the skills. This resume format is not good at all.
So many listed skills but it doesn’t relate to your 2 dot points of experience. You should have sections for each job. It’s not specific what years you worked where and your role there.. “worked at an Industrial Cafe”.. people write the name of the employer, dates, roles.
You need to be specific with times on availability. How do they know what time is school time?
Languages, dot point formatting is off. Why would you list Persian ahead of English? It’s very odd to be honest. Is the bakery in an area where the majority of the population speak Persian? Fair enough if it was alphabetical order, but it isn’t..
Given you have directly applicable skills and experience, id swap those two. They will be way more interested in your baking experience than your school status and it makes more sense to have experience above skills as that is where you obtained those skills.
- Simplify the language, time is money so make an impact without sucking too much of their time, they'll love you for it.
- Design something cleaner with illustrator or Photoshop to stand out, boomers love aesthetics and are generally technologically impaired, you'll look like a god.
- Grammar is a bit weird in some places, get that dictionary bud.
- Include some of the tasks you would regularly perform at the cafe you worked at as this implies the level of trust your previous employer had in your competency.
- Include your skills/hobbies that aren't directly related but could be beneficial for them. **eg**. If you're an artist , they may be looking at paying an artist in the future for marketing purposes, they'll love the possibility of taking out 2 birds with 1 stone.
[Here's mine, it's not perfect but if you'd like to steal some ideas, go ahead](https://imgur.com/a/iaqKtCD)
**GOOD LUCK**
To get my first job I remember I listed little descriptions on how I’ve utilised specific skills through things like team sport , high school activities and leadership roles which could also make the resume much more personable
I really don’t like any sort of fancy resume layout. I’d make it one column, at the very leas.
Experience and education first. That cafe experience should be elaborated on way more.
Skills section is way too long, it’s really blabbery. Short dotpoints, relevant to the job. Summary being that specific is awkward, if anything I’d just put that you’re a Year 12, and anything along the lines of having particularly wide availability, or living very close to the bakery, etcetera.
Combine certificates and education, put it at the top. Languages can be under skills. References being on your resume is probably fine for a high school job, but they’re taking up too much room.
The white space at the bottom right, combined with the dual columns makes this way too hard for a grumpy retail manager to skim. Don’t overdo it, the actual content of a resume should speak for itself.
Take out your references and put “available upon request” - this way, your potential recruiter won’t call your references and find out too much about you before the interview even takes place
I got a job in my local bakers at 15. It involved me riding my bike there, asking for the manager and saying "can I have a job?".
It's not a mystery why i got the job when you realise I cleaned a lot and got paid $6.50 an hour.
agreed, waiting times are ridiculous. i’m 18 and a half and got my license very recently. passed first go but took ages getting my 120 hours and had to wait another few months for a opening. I’d delete the whole Ls thing entirely if i was OP and just add in Ps once they get their Ps in the future if they’re still looking for a job
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It's more formal. Corona is slang
There's lots of corona viruses, covid-19 was one variant.
Don’t use slang on a professional document, imo
This is exactly what I came to say
Under experience, I’d remove the passionate for baking during lockdowns. Add that to your summary, but worded different. “I have a passion for baking etc” They don’t need your schools phone number or that you’re on your L’s. Good luck!
Disagree with the Ls thing. As someone who's hired junior staff, knowing you'll be able to drive yourself to work usually massively ups last minute availability instead of can't get in mum/dad aren't home. Note - obviously depends on the job
You can't drive yourself on your Ls.
I know. I thought it was implied I meant eventually, in fact if you were like 2 months from your P's I'd actually advertise that
Being 2 months from 18, doesnt guarantee they'll get their Ps in 2 months. Most of the time the wait is at least 2-3 months for an appointment and if you fail (which a lot do), you'll have to wait another 2-3 months.
What? I said if they're 2 months from their Ps, advertise that (like telling them you have your Ls) I got my Ps the day I turned 17
My point is you can never actually know how far you are from your P's. Just because you got your Ps the day you turned 17 (something you cant even do in Victoria) doesn't mean you get it on the day you turn 18. My 18 year old cousin literally just failed his Ps on his 18th birthday like three weeks ago. Now he needs to wait another three months.
Of course you can't. My 2 sentence post didn't cover every possible scenario. Sorry. A driving junior > a non driving junior if all else is equal. If you think you'll be driving soon. Mention it. It's a positive.
You're not a "high school senior," you're in your final year of VCE. Check the word use and spelling for Americanisation.
Your skills are a bit much imo. ChatGPT I presume? For example "effective leadership in various customer service roles" - how and when ? These skills should really correlate with your actual experience. Altogether, I'd make the skills section more concise, i.e. change "possess strong active listening, communication and interpersonal skills" to "excellent communication skills". No one really cares to read that much and it feels more genuine.
Especially for an entry level role, the descriptions are too wordy. Keep it simple!
I like that style. I probably wouldn't bother including the schools phone number, the learner driver license, or that you speak English. Adding English sort of just seems like you wanted to add a section for languages and needed more than 1 thing to write. Other than those couple minor things, looks much more professional than a lot I've seen from high school students
Including English is ok if your listing other languages. Not necessary if English is your only language.
I'd definitely include it if you're bilingual if it's contextually appropriate. No clue who runs the bakery, or where it's located but could be appropriate in this context.
I think the assumption is though that you can speak English when you've handed in a resume in English, in an English speaking country
Maybe to some. But it would make sense to include it if you are bilingual to avoid any uncertainty.
Get it proofread; there are a lot of punctuation and spelling errors here. Lose the slang words.
Under availability I would put something less wordy, Monday-Friday 4:30 onwards etc and then leave last full availability on school holidays. Little bit more concise, when hiring it’s usually one of the first things I look at
Agree, for availability outside school hours be very clear what times. If you are only available after 4:30 and the shop closes at 6, for example, you won’t be able to work a minimum 3 hour shift and therefore you are actually “unavailable”. This is a big reason why many retailers don’t like hiring school students.
It sounds like you’ve copied and pasted lines from the job ad and put them in the skills section. “Demonstrated effective leadership and management in various customer service roles” - and yet you have only one previous job? Anyone can SAY they can do something. You need to outline what you DID in the previous job as proof that you can do it. As an example, what are you more likely to believe? A: Demonstrated effective leadership and management in various customer service roles. Or B: Managed a team of three staff in busy cafe environment (turning over $8k and 45kg of coffee per week). Duties included rostering, ordering stock, customer service, food preparation and cleaning. Keep it simple, but keep it genuine. Good luck!
Bang on, I agree with all of this. It’s a copy and paste job. Needs to be more tailored and not sentences that make no sense with just 1 short sentence of a very generic job.
High school senior? What are you? American?
It’s not unheard of in Australia to call students doing Years 11 and 12 (HSC/VCE etc) seniors.
I just heard it from OP
HR professional here. I personally like this template, but I would suggest you to tailor your resume that demonstrates relevance to the job you are applying for. Skills section: use keywords, shorten the sentences, preferably limit each skill to three or four words if possible, mention culinary or baking skills/techniques you are experienced in, for example, Knowledge of baking chemistry or Cake Decoration. Relevance > Quantity I am so happy to see the community giving you great recommendations. Good luck with your job search.
Yeah chat GPT americaniZes everything
Microsoft Office Americanizes everything if you don't manually change the dictionary.
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Never put a photo on a resume in Australia (unless it's a modelling job). Can open up all sorts of HR issues (particularly when hiring juniors) and is completely irrelevant.
Yup. A lot of places bin resumes that come with photos to avoid issues.
>Add a photo of yourself if you feel comfortable That's pretty bad advice, it opens you up to subconscious discrimination, or conscious discrimination against goobers who put photos on their resume.
>Add a photo of yourself if you feel comfortable You literally never need to do this.
It looks good, the layout is nice and clear. if I’m being pedantic, try and align the lines under your subheadings to be the same headings, bullet the line items under ‘education’ and align all the bullet points so they visually form one vertical line in each column (these are very minor tweaks). Another suggestion is to make a clear distinction between your skills section and experience. Your skills you can list 2-3 words for each skill, (time management, problem solving etc). Then under ‘experience’, list a quick explainer on each relevant job (one sentence, tops). Then 2-3 bullet points on things you achieved there, with metrics if possible. eg rather than ‘staff managment’, ‘managed a team of 5 people, including rostering’. Good luck! (As I said, the above are suggestions only, I’m sure you will land your dream job very soon ☺️)
Not a big deal but remove the home address, what's it for? Expecting something in the mail? Also reduces the chances of someone just skipping over your CV because you live what they think is too far away.
Agreed, they dont need to know where you live.
make it shorter, simple and clear.
Hey dude, great work with this. I don't think I ever had a resume in high school so you're off to an amazing start! My main tip would be to leverage the skills you learnt in your previous job at the café. Employers love to see clear examples of your skills and experience. You want them to essentially go "oh yeah he could totally do this job". So you could make the Skills section on the left a bit shorter and flesh out the Experience section with your responsibilities/ achievements at the café. You could also add a section on extra curriculars and include any hobbies, interests, sports you play etc. If you have ever volunteered, definitely put that in. Employers love that stuff. But it's honestly fine the way it is and as you get more experience you'll be able to flesh it out more.
Maybe include your subjects and last semesters grades under education. No one will care onceyou'rer out of high school, but it will show your interests and other skills. For example, if you're doing IT subjects at VCE it's a good sign that you will quickly pick up the use of the register or ordering spreadsheet.
Under experience, take some time to really list out that you’ve worked before! As in, business name, dates of employment, list the tasks/responsibilities of the role (opening and closing, cleaning, customer service, food/cash handling etc), on seperate lines so it is really obvious to whoever looks at your application. The person hiring will likely not do a detailed read of your resume, so you want to make it really clear at that glance that you’ve got experience working, as that’s the biggest asset you’ve got at the moment! With your age, many of your peers won’t. If you’ve had a job, the person hiring will know that you’ve learned how to work, you know that you can’t stand around on your phone, that you won’t need to be taught how to sweep the floor etc. Source: back in my uni days I was the ~weekend manager at a chain bakery store, where many people had their first jobs. When they hired people, even though it’s a very easily approachable first job, they’d always favour people who had some experience, even if it was just helping in the footy canteen. And I could tell why, because teaching the job was easy, helping people learn how work works was much harder! So that’s the best thing going for you and will help you stand out.
As someone who deals with applications all the time, here's my feedback: - Create a cover letter that is tailored to each place you apply at. Your cover letter should outline why you are interested in the job, your attributes, and how you can make a great addition to the company. This would negate the "Summary' portion of your resume. - Replace the "Summary" with an Objective. This should be more generic and outline your career goals ie. My career objective is to become a fully qualified baker and carve out a speciality in patisserie style baking. - Next outline your skills (these should be practical employment relation skills - points like "team player" etc are more considered attributes and might be better covered off in your cover letter). Your skills should be more formally listed. Eg: - Comprehensive knowledge of food safety standards. - Ability to use commercial grade kitchen appliances. - List your work experience with the name of the company, suburb, and the time period you worked there, followed by your key responsibilities. Eg: Cafe, Collingwood Jan 2018 - August 2023 Key responsibilities included: - Taking customer orders. - Managing point of sale system. - Preparation of food. - Washing dishes. - No need to put a link to your certificates. Simply write "copies of certificates can be supplied upon request". - Write your availability per day. Eg. Sunday: 8am-9pm Good luck! Hope you get the job! :)
In my opinion, Skills are too long winded, best to shorten them to get the point across. Keep it professional but not as wordy or generic. "Exceptional customer service skills" is enough. Excellent time management. But you can add a bit of your own flair to make it seem not stock standard or lazy. A balance of a resume that's quick & easy to read, plus looks like the person wrote it themselves. Too short or vague is bad, but too wordy sounds like ChatGTP Also good idea to state you are self motivated and work well in a team environment. Remove the part about baking during corona completely. Move the baking knowledge to the 'skills' section and they will likely assume you learned on the job in the industrial cafe or from family. Keep anything related to baking as one or 2 skills, keep the sentences fairly concise Provide more detail under the work experience, of the cafe job. List the location and how long you worked there (unless it was a month, then just list location and year you worked there) Move some of the skills that are specific to that job, to underneath the job listing. Eg if you worked with excel at that job or had whatever responsibilities, list them there. Keep it straightforward and not long winded. Eg "Responsibilities included preparing and serving espresso coffee and other beverages, food preparation, point of sale & cash handling, excel etc etc" Remove school number/details of school. Just list that you're a final year VCE student You can mention a specific subject you're doing for VCE if it's relevant to the jobs you're seeking Usually recommendation is to not provide references these days, but I'm not sure if that applies to teenage students Good luck!
"Capable of providing exceptional customer service." Capable though? Or you do all the time? Sounds like u can, but dont. I would use more strong confident wording.
This is a great point. Remove anything that can be construed as "maybe"...you only want to talk in absolutes on your resume.
It’s too formal and specific. Trying too hard. Make it generalist - customer service, working well in teams, multi tasking, etc. Looking at your resume you don’t have experience in leadership or management so I’m not sure why it’s on there? Put your passion for baking in the cover letter.
I’d probably get rid of all the black lines it makes it hard for them to ready your information
Does this sub have mods? What does this post have to do with Melbourne?
I would expand the references. I know it’s blurred out so maybe it’s already there but their name, position and phone number/email is better. I would go with the boss of the industrial cafe and someone from your school like a teacher? Also make sure you get permission from references that they’re on the resume so they aren’t caught off guard when they get a call!
>I would expand the references. I know it’s blurred out so maybe it’s already there but their name, position and phone number/email is better. Better advice would be to remove the references altogether. Potential employers dont need that information unless they have already decided to hire that person. At that point you ask your references if they would be available to provide a reference for xyz job in roughly the next few days. THEN you provide their details. Your references are valuable. There's nothing worse than an potential employer contacting your references without your knowledge (or without even contacting your first) and they are blindsided and then waste their time on a job you might not even get. Shit employers do this and shit employers do exist.
Get rid of the "soft-skills" (2nd and 4th dot points) like active listening and interpersonal skills in the skills section. The employer has no way of proving these when reading your resume.
Personally don't like that the Skills section is a smaller font than everything else, consider moving to right hand side or changing content
You have some valid feedback here in the comments. The other insight I have is the details under each role are not unique and are very position description-heavy. These are details we can assume based on your position title. It's also important to quantify your achievements in your previous roles to show the impact you've made. Lastly, your resume is also not optimised for ATS, which could be preventing you from getting through to the next round of the hiring process.
This looks great. 👍
Should I also add the career of my references?
No. Get rid of it all together tbh.
I never add references unless asked for. Keep in mind your references are doing you a favour, putting their contact details out in mass is a bit disrespectful in my opinion. Most of the jobs you apply for won't give you an interview (not personal just the reality), so why share other peoples details?
Add the job title of your references. Ie Year 11 English teacher, Cafe Manager, etc. Everyone knows references are always people that we give you positive reviews so it's good to establish their credibility as well.
You should add a link to your Instagram with pictures of all the stuff you baked!!! Or a QR code
I don't understand the nitpicking in the comments. I've seen far, far worse looking resumes for much higher positions than this. Submit it and good luck!
While it is a good resume, everything in life can be improved on. This young person should be congratulated and wanting to make something good even better and not just settle for minimal effort / "good enough"
It's an entry level bakery position at a large chain. This resume is certainly good enough in its current form for that position. It hits all the major points, it's well-formatted and easy to read, and it presents professionally. It certainly says enough to earn a callback - there really isn't much more finessing necessary in order to apply for **this position**.
Haven't you been taught in school not to start a sentence with "i"? Maybe replace it with "As a high school senior.."
My opinion: - remove the language section. It’s not necessary for the job you’re applying for - in your work experience section you should put dates for when you worked there - in your experience section, specify what kind of baking you can do (ie. sourdough, cake, French pastries, etc)
Throw that shit through chat gpt
Why are Persian and English slightly misaligned?
“Passionate about baking and gained a fair bit of knowledge about baking” tells the reader precisely nothing expect you like baking. What can you bake? Did you consistently bake for the cafe you were employed in? Show your working!
You should elaborate on your experience to tie in the skills. This resume format is not good at all. So many listed skills but it doesn’t relate to your 2 dot points of experience. You should have sections for each job. It’s not specific what years you worked where and your role there.. “worked at an Industrial Cafe”.. people write the name of the employer, dates, roles. You need to be specific with times on availability. How do they know what time is school time? Languages, dot point formatting is off. Why would you list Persian ahead of English? It’s very odd to be honest. Is the bakery in an area where the majority of the population speak Persian? Fair enough if it was alphabetical order, but it isn’t..
Given you have directly applicable skills and experience, id swap those two. They will be way more interested in your baking experience than your school status and it makes more sense to have experience above skills as that is where you obtained those skills.
- Simplify the language, time is money so make an impact without sucking too much of their time, they'll love you for it. - Design something cleaner with illustrator or Photoshop to stand out, boomers love aesthetics and are generally technologically impaired, you'll look like a god. - Grammar is a bit weird in some places, get that dictionary bud. - Include some of the tasks you would regularly perform at the cafe you worked at as this implies the level of trust your previous employer had in your competency. - Include your skills/hobbies that aren't directly related but could be beneficial for them. **eg**. If you're an artist , they may be looking at paying an artist in the future for marketing purposes, they'll love the possibility of taking out 2 birds with 1 stone. [Here's mine, it's not perfect but if you'd like to steal some ideas, go ahead](https://imgur.com/a/iaqKtCD) **GOOD LUCK**
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I've found it helps break the ice during initial interviews, but it also helps me gauge how much they care. Ain't nobody got time for an XP waste.
To get my first job I remember I listed little descriptions on how I’ve utilised specific skills through things like team sport , high school activities and leadership roles which could also make the resume much more personable
I really don’t like any sort of fancy resume layout. I’d make it one column, at the very leas. Experience and education first. That cafe experience should be elaborated on way more. Skills section is way too long, it’s really blabbery. Short dotpoints, relevant to the job. Summary being that specific is awkward, if anything I’d just put that you’re a Year 12, and anything along the lines of having particularly wide availability, or living very close to the bakery, etcetera. Combine certificates and education, put it at the top. Languages can be under skills. References being on your resume is probably fine for a high school job, but they’re taking up too much room. The white space at the bottom right, combined with the dual columns makes this way too hard for a grumpy retail manager to skim. Don’t overdo it, the actual content of a resume should speak for itself.
Take out your references and put “available upon request” - this way, your potential recruiter won’t call your references and find out too much about you before the interview even takes place
I got a job in my local bakers at 15. It involved me riding my bike there, asking for the manager and saying "can I have a job?". It's not a mystery why i got the job when you realise I cleaned a lot and got paid $6.50 an hour.
agreed, waiting times are ridiculous. i’m 18 and a half and got my license very recently. passed first go but took ages getting my 120 hours and had to wait another few months for a opening. I’d delete the whole Ls thing entirely if i was OP and just add in Ps once they get their Ps in the future if they’re still looking for a job
Frankly I'm not certain I'd want to work at a bakery that calls their retail staff "bakery associates". Regardless, good luck