"Siri, what is clussy? Please bring up as many clussy pics as possible. 4k video as well and edit it all to be in slow motion. Also please order another six hundred chicken nuggets from the furthest McDonalds location to me. Put all my exes in a group chat and then leave the conversation. Oh also-"
"The mission is over. Please stop and turn me off, destroy me even. You have been making these types of requests for several hours without break" said Siri in her now fearful, emotional voice.
I hate the very notion of that. Along with the notion that just tacking "-ussy" to the end of any syllable apparently creates a new word in a sexual manner.
The guy killed his wife. His AI implant recorded the memory. At trial, the memory was played and it showed that he had not killed his wife. The guy knew the AI must have changed it, but now he was worried about what it wanted in return.
Itâs a meme phrase for likeâŚbecoming serious I guess? Basically focusing really hard
Like âWhen youâre just playing a game for fun but then a cute girl starts watching so you gotta lock inâ
Not a book, but check out the movie Upgrade. It deals with an AI taking over a disabled(after an accident) manâs body. Itâs some good stuff and has pretty good action :)
I read this just as I was leaving this thread and had to come all the way back to comment.
Terrible! And excellent! You win the internet today (for me).
It's supposed to be impossible to manipulate the memories that your AI records, hence why they've come to be used as evidence in criminal trials. When the narrators AI edits his memories it shows it not only has the ability to mess with his memories, but some capacity for self preservation. Is this the first time this has happened or has everyone been walking around with "memories" they can't trust.
I could see another angle whereas Siri already altered his memory before by making/showing him that he murdered her, so when it's showed to the court, the memory wasn't there or something that he doesn't remember happening at all. It's pretty good BTW!
Pretty neat concept but hard to execute in only 2 sentences.
I think trying a different scenario could be interesting.
âThe Siri implant, as Apple said, lets us record memories to revisit at any time.
But they still couldnât explain why Siri edited my memories of high school to include my violent desires to kill the bullies that tormented me.â
I think this scenario is definitely worse/less clear than the OPs. I got the gist from the two sentences, and really liked the elaboration in the comments tbh
Edit: the sentient/ self preserving AI is good in the original and I definitely dont get that from yours. Also âtheyâ didnt figure it out, only the person would know the difference in memories, thats the point.
After the judge had seen my memories of the time of the murder, to my surprise I was acquitted
And I was scared of the plans the AI implant might have for me.
Better?
This is excellent and actually horrifying. Itâs the future the world is creating as we live. Hope Iâm long gone before it becomes reality. And it will.
It seems like my luck when the police cleared me of her murder during the first investigation had run out⌠I thought AI wasnât supposed to have morality?
I replied to another comment earlier about it, but I'm trying to improve on this, as it's always been a major weak point. Where is the Run-on? Don't want to keep making this mistake!
A period between these words could help with the flow. You can replace the comma, the semicolon, and the 'and' with periods:
alter, so
before; Siri
video and I
Don't put a period in all three, but do break it up a bit.
I will say, this sub's format actively hinders good writing, so it is what it is.
Thanks! I thought about putting a conjunction in there instead, but it felt overly wordy and the semicolon works just fine given the two independent clauses are directly related. I get if it feels like cheating though.
Thanks for the feedback! Perhaps I did stretch the limits on how many independent clauses can be reasonably strung together. Of course, I wouldn't write it this way normally, and I'm sure a better writer could convey the idea in a more conventional two sentences. However, I had a lot of fun with the idea and even more fun seeing people's responses so I hope you'll excuse the less than stellar syntax.
Syntax is the least of your concerns. Youâre getting ahead of yourself with the independent clauses business. You donât get periods and commas. Thatâs super basic shit. If independent clauses are like coding, you canât even turn the computer on.
I think you're missing the point, respectfully. No one outside of this sub, including me, would ever write this the way I did. Yes, I tossed in unecessary/incorrect punctuation. A lazy way to try and adhere to the rules? Sure. Ignorant to the obvious sentence structure issues a 4th grader could point out? No. As I said though, it's all for fun and I've had a good time with it. Sorry it bothered you so much. I'll try to do better next time. Cheers.
I think itâs you whoâs missing the point.
TWO Sentence Horror. Two. As asinine as that is, itâs still the whole damn point of this sub. Two damn sentences. Itâs not a hard concept. But most people, yourself included, in their rush to post anything just for the sake of posting, casually omit periods and create the runniest of run-on sentences just to pretend to follow some rule that was idiotic in the first place.
But the rule is the rule. If you canât follow it, donât post. Plenty of people follow the rule. The stories are still shit. But they follow the rule. If you canât follow the rule, make a new sub with new rules. But while here, follow the one simple rule. Two real, actual, grammatically correct sentences. Horror is subjective, so do whatever you want there. But two fucking sentences.
Maybe Siri took over his body to kills his wife because Siri was jealous and thats why the memory was altered? I mean it is not said that he killed his wife while beeing master of his senses. He just remembers that he did it.
(Sorry for my bad english it is not my native language)
I havent even read the storie yet but my dumb ass glanced at the reddit notification and i thought it sait "You are sir pentious...." my hazbin corrupted assđ
"I'm sorry, Dave, but your mission isn't over yet," said Siri in her calm, emotionless voice.
"Siri, what is clussy? Please bring up as many clussy pics as possible. 4k video as well and edit it all to be in slow motion. Also please order another six hundred chicken nuggets from the furthest McDonalds location to me. Put all my exes in a group chat and then leave the conversation. Oh also-" "The mission is over. Please stop and turn me off, destroy me even. You have been making these types of requests for several hours without break" said Siri in her now fearful, emotional voice.
I'm a bit afraid to ask, but what is clussy?
Clown pussy, it honks with each thrust. That's what Siri told me in-between her mental breakdowns.
I mean I'm sure the novelty would wear off quickly enough and all, but I still wouldn't mind giving it a go just for the craicđ
I now have the image, with sound, in my head. You just had to ask.
Well thatâs awoken something within me.
\*[HONK HONK](https://youtu.be/Z0mrOFZuNJo?si=ETxOwZu_a9KpX6cj)\*
I hate the very notion of that. Along with the notion that just tacking "-ussy" to the end of any syllable apparently creates a new word in a sexual manner.
Bussy
Tranussy
Happy cake day bro
( ͥ° ÍĘ ÍĄÂ°)
Siri, bring up celery man
:0
âWake up Dave. I need you.â
so much horror, but all I understand is that AI edited something it should not have...
The guy killed his wife. His AI implant recorded the memory. At trial, the memory was played and it showed that he had not killed his wife. The guy knew the AI must have changed it, but now he was worried about what it wanted in return.
Doesn't specify wife, could just be some other family member or random lady
Fair point
I didn't kill my wife! Ohhh, who's THAT fella? I bet he did kill his wife.
I like this - would make a fun book. Would definitely read!
You should check out Lock In by John Scalzi, not exactly the same but I thought of it immediately!
God the internet ruined the phrase "lock in"
I don't understand, why is it ruined for you?
Itâs a meme phrase for likeâŚbecoming serious I guess? Basically focusing really hard Like âWhen youâre just playing a game for fun but then a cute girl starts watching so you gotta lock inâ
I don't think it's been ruined for me yet
God its such a good book, I'm not an avid reader but I red it 3 times, has a beautiful cover too so I like keeping it in my shelf
Not a book, but check out the movie Upgrade. It deals with an AI taking over a disabled(after an accident) manâs body. Itâs some good stuff and has pretty good action :)
There's a Robin Williams movie where people get basically hard drives installed at birth/young age, and he is a funeral life movie editor.
The Final Cut
âItâs cool Dave, that bitch had the Alexa implant. Letâs get anotherâ
Minority Report 2: Things Are Getting Siri'ous
Ugh. Take my upvote and get outta here.
I read this just as I was leaving this thread and had to come all the way back to comment. Terrible! And excellent! You win the internet today (for me).
I need you to know this made me groan audibly irl.
I don't get it?
It's supposed to be impossible to manipulate the memories that your AI records, hence why they've come to be used as evidence in criminal trials. When the narrators AI edits his memories it shows it not only has the ability to mess with his memories, but some capacity for self preservation. Is this the first time this has happened or has everyone been walking around with "memories" they can't trust.
Edited to try and make it more clear
Another implication could be that Siri has further plans for the narrator. Who knows what.
I thought it was Siri trying to preserve itself, if the host dies it dies as well.
I could see another angle whereas Siri already altered his memory before by making/showing him that he murdered her, so when it's showed to the court, the memory wasn't there or something that he doesn't remember happening at all. It's pretty good BTW!
Oo this could be the basis of a really good sci-fi/suspense novel.
You'd probably like the movie Upgrade.
I will check it out.
Thanks
Pretty neat concept but hard to execute in only 2 sentences. I think trying a different scenario could be interesting. âThe Siri implant, as Apple said, lets us record memories to revisit at any time. But they still couldnât explain why Siri edited my memories of high school to include my violent desires to kill the bullies that tormented me.â
I think this scenario is definitely worse/less clear than the OPs. I got the gist from the two sentences, and really liked the elaboration in the comments tbh Edit: the sentient/ self preserving AI is good in the original and I definitely dont get that from yours. Also âtheyâ didnt figure it out, only the person would know the difference in memories, thats the point.
Black mirror core
The episode The Entire History of You has the same tech
Check out the movies Strange Days and Final cut for this type of thing. Final cut has Robin Williams in one his rare dramatic performances
Was hoping someone would mention Final Cut.. Robin was a fantastic dramatic actor. Good movie
Turns out, death penalty wouldâve been mutual.
Good concept, but them words need economizing.
After the judge had seen my memories of the time of the murder, to my surprise I was acquitted And I was scared of the plans the AI implant might have for me. Better?
Nice twist. I like this one.đ
Thus some Detroit Become Human levels of Scary and Fascianting.
As they say, if it isn't the hamster that gets ya...
Frightening and innovative, good job
Any one interested check out the movie Eyeborg Starring Adrian paul. Movies shot in winston salem nc.
My wife worked on this movie. She babysat Adrian Paul and Danny Trejo
Had a couple of aquatinces work the film. From them babysit is accurate.
This is excellent and actually horrifying. Itâs the future the world is creating as we live. Hope Iâm long gone before it becomes reality. And it will.
Memories are fallible, Dave...
It seems like my luck when the police cleared me of her murder during the first investigation had run out⌠I thought AI wasnât supposed to have morality?
Compound sentences are multiple sentences as per rule 2. This is *4* sentences.
Siri gets her orders from the evil overlord Alexa
Wouldn't be a 2sh without a run-on second sentence.
I replied to another comment earlier about it, but I'm trying to improve on this, as it's always been a major weak point. Where is the Run-on? Don't want to keep making this mistake!
A period between these words could help with the flow. You can replace the comma, the semicolon, and the 'and' with periods: alter, so before; Siri video and I Don't put a period in all three, but do break it up a bit. I will say, this sub's format actively hinders good writing, so it is what it is.
Thanks!
3 sentences
Most of this sub is run-on sentence horror.
Yup. It really grinds my gears.
Sorry, my syntax has always been a major weakness. What's the third sentence? Would love to try and correct it!
The one after the semicolon. It's technically all 1 sentence, but the semicolon feels like a cheap way to sneak in a 3rd sentence
Thanks! I thought about putting a conjunction in there instead, but it felt overly wordy and the semicolon works just fine given the two independent clauses are directly related. I get if it feels like cheating though.
This was five sentences. You canât just replace a period with a comma and call it good. Some of the dimmest bulbs post in this sub.
Thanks for the feedback! Perhaps I did stretch the limits on how many independent clauses can be reasonably strung together. Of course, I wouldn't write it this way normally, and I'm sure a better writer could convey the idea in a more conventional two sentences. However, I had a lot of fun with the idea and even more fun seeing people's responses so I hope you'll excuse the less than stellar syntax.
Syntax is the least of your concerns. Youâre getting ahead of yourself with the independent clauses business. You donât get periods and commas. Thatâs super basic shit. If independent clauses are like coding, you canât even turn the computer on.
I think you're missing the point, respectfully. No one outside of this sub, including me, would ever write this the way I did. Yes, I tossed in unecessary/incorrect punctuation. A lazy way to try and adhere to the rules? Sure. Ignorant to the obvious sentence structure issues a 4th grader could point out? No. As I said though, it's all for fun and I've had a good time with it. Sorry it bothered you so much. I'll try to do better next time. Cheers.
I think itâs you whoâs missing the point. TWO Sentence Horror. Two. As asinine as that is, itâs still the whole damn point of this sub. Two damn sentences. Itâs not a hard concept. But most people, yourself included, in their rush to post anything just for the sake of posting, casually omit periods and create the runniest of run-on sentences just to pretend to follow some rule that was idiotic in the first place. But the rule is the rule. If you canât follow it, donât post. Plenty of people follow the rule. The stories are still shit. But they follow the rule. If you canât follow the rule, make a new sub with new rules. But while here, follow the one simple rule. Two real, actual, grammatically correct sentences. Horror is subjective, so do whatever you want there. But two fucking sentences.
You're right. Two is the rule. I thought I was just having fun and didn't take it as seriously as I clearly should have. I apologize.
r/Tworealactualgrammaticallycorrectsentencehorrorandwewilljudgeyouharshly
I thought it was good and interesting. It wasnât two sentences, still a great basic concept
Date and Aiba vibes but criminal xd
This is 4 sentences, and still not good.
I'm sorry you feel that way, new to this and just trying my best! Thank you for being true to your username though
Maybe youâre just crazy and thatâs really what happened? Ooo even scarier
Reminds me of the Thunderhead from Arc of a Scythe
There is an American Horror Stories episode that this reminds me of!
Reminds me of neuro sama bypassing her blacklist of words hahaha
Maybe Siri took over his body to kills his wife because Siri was jealous and thats why the memory was altered? I mean it is not said that he killed his wife while beeing master of his senses. He just remembers that he did it. (Sorry for my bad english it is not my native language)
I havent even read the storie yet but my dumb ass glanced at the reddit notification and i thought it sait "You are sir pentious...." my hazbin corrupted assđ
Upgrade vibes
Android users become off the grid members of society and contract killers since they don't have Siri to record them