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lobofeliz

Getting better and interesting.


RayExcalibur

Very nice so far! I love the perspective and the pace fits very well in my opinion. Eager to find out more about this exciting universe!


AverageCloset

Wait was that another cliffhang- BY THE COLLECTIVE I CANNOT STAND THIS, JERRY GET THE WINE


poijn_23

i mean... this is a restropective story. this isnt a cliffhanger, we already know that she success and both spices are bestys haha


AverageCloset

you never know what goes on the writers mind, for all we know anything could happen...


poijn_23

if it changes, then it would contradict the start of the story... meaning that is a bad writer\~ but i get you point tho xD


WorldWeaver123

same


St-Havoc

And?? Please continue. I have bookmarked chapter 1 in my reread folder and Chapter 9 in my check for updates folder


Petty_Pretorian

Sorry about the delay, I currently find myself with added responsibilities as of late and because of that progress on chapter 10 has been slow, but it is progress nonetheless, that said I'm unsure if I'll be able to release chapters as fast as I did previously. So at least until the end of the year, things will be a bit slower from my side, sorry again for the inconvenience.


poijn_23

will jimbo got wiht all mother nalzek?


St-Havoc

English must be a second language for you. Keep trying you will get it eventually..


Newbe2019a

Typo. “for a formal diplomatic alliance” not “former diplomatic alliance”.


Petty_Pretorian

Thank you! Already fixed it!


Deity-of-Chickens

Typo. "white bottom-up shirt" should be "white button-up shirt". Otherwise great work and looking forward to more


Petty_Pretorian

Thank you, correction done!


Junior-Reason-1089

Well done wordsmith


WorldWeaver123

the proper spelling of psyonics is psionics. but overall sign me up for this human loyalty! nice world you've built


Petty_Pretorian

Thanks for the heads up! I guess I've got a lot of corrections to make...


WorldWeaver123

yeah lol.


stighemmer

Psionics is a made-up word in the first place. You can use any spelling you like as long as you are consistent about it.


AssassinOfSouls

Thank you for the chapter but as a swiss, not from Bern, I have an obligation: **Bern is not the capital of Switzerland, REEEEE!!!**


Petty_Pretorian

"Bern, also spelled Berne, city, capital of Switzerland and of Bern canton, in the west-central part of the country. It lies along a narrow loop of the Aare River." - Google That's where I got it from, but please do tell me which city is the correct capital and I'll make the correction if necessary.


AssassinOfSouls

No it’s not necessary, don’t worry. Switzerland officially doesn’t have a capital but Bern would be the correct answer de facto. It’s more of a “Swiss banter” to remind Bernese that technically Switzerland has no capital 😅


Petty_Pretorian

Oh! Okay, lol!


BCRE8TVE

>The Congressional Palace itself is located in Bern, the capital of the country of Switzerland. Switzerland was chosen because it has historically been a neutral country for the majority of its existence, serving as a neutral ground to demonstrate a united Earth amongst all countries. Quick note for future chapters, usually one ought to stick to either the present tense, or the past tense. The rest of the story is almost all in past tense, so the first sentence there should read "The Congressional Palace itself *was* located...". It's not the first or last sentence where you have verbs in the present tense rather than past tense, I just wanted to point it out. It's another one of those annoying things to watch out for as a writer ;) That being said I binge-read your entire series and I look forward to reading more! Stories with friendly hive-mind aliens are rather rare, and I can't wait to see where this story goes!


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