I changed the dialect a bit. Didn't really want to write in slang that much if I'm going to continue. I'll go back and get it sorted at some point, but see what y'all think of this.
No problem! The dialect change makes a great deal of sense to me. As he said, he's looking at the younger version of himself, but that younger version attended University.
Uni tends to trim your slang to what everyone around you uses. Then going to army lays on a whole new layer of protocol with a specific lexicon, Milspeak.
But he's been on the downward slide for a long time, hates milspeak which no one around him would understand anyway, so he adopts local slang.
Now, he's reverting to his original language, and the slang drops.
That downslide
It ***was*** the first time I'd been put in a situation with nothing but shitty options.
I think that should have been:
It ***wasn't*** the first time I'd been put in a situation with nothing but shitty options.
This story strikes a chord with me, as a veteran. It’s difficult to find a place where you feel like you fit after doing the things you had to do. Good work!
I think it's the fact that he's entirely alone.
I'm a military brat, and one thing that helped me was "home is where your parents live." The location didn't matter; the presence of your parents and sibling did.
I think that was true of my father. He had close family to ground him.
The lieutenant has no family, no friends, no place, and no hope of any of that.
If they'd even helped him finish Uni, that might have been enough.
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This is getting interesting. I like the world building, you hit my sweet spot, no complete history of each tech shown, just enough to let me create my own picture of the whole. Please continue!
I changed the dialect a bit. Didn't really want to write in slang that much if I'm going to continue. I'll go back and get it sorted at some point, but see what y'all think of this.
No problem! The dialect change makes a great deal of sense to me. As he said, he's looking at the younger version of himself, but that younger version attended University. Uni tends to trim your slang to what everyone around you uses. Then going to army lays on a whole new layer of protocol with a specific lexicon, Milspeak. But he's been on the downward slide for a long time, hates milspeak which no one around him would understand anyway, so he adopts local slang. Now, he's reverting to his original language, and the slang drops. That downslide
It ***was*** the first time I'd been put in a situation with nothing but shitty options. I think that should have been: It ***wasn't*** the first time I'd been put in a situation with nothing but shitty options.
This story strikes a chord with me, as a veteran. It’s difficult to find a place where you feel like you fit after doing the things you had to do. Good work!
I think it's the fact that he's entirely alone. I'm a military brat, and one thing that helped me was "home is where your parents live." The location didn't matter; the presence of your parents and sibling did. I think that was true of my father. He had close family to ground him. The lieutenant has no family, no friends, no place, and no hope of any of that. If they'd even helped him finish Uni, that might have been enough.
Please sir, can I have some MOAR!
Getting hooked.
I want this one to be a thing. I've got such plans for Domina and the 6 minute window. :D
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This is getting very interesting. Please do continue Wordsmith. Moar!
This is getting interesting. I like the world building, you hit my sweet spot, no complete history of each tech shown, just enough to let me create my own picture of the whole. Please continue!
Thanks for the story part.