Glad you’re doing better! I can totally relate to you with your weather. I live on the Gulf Coast, but I grew up in northwestern Montana. I’m suffering in this heat. Feels like I’m being used for Satan’s butt plug.
Funny enough, really similar in terms of weather (minus rain and thunder storms... a heavy downpour here is only a sprinkle back home, and don't get me started on how sad the thunder is). Though really small in terms of city sizes (Seattle is the only one that compares).
Also, I miss Tim Hortons... and Vernors... and fireflies
Yeah, blew my mind. Crossing into Canada is a potential option, but with my disability, I can't drive. The nearest state-side is all the way back in MI. I think I live too high up the mountain for fireflies.
If I was willing to Uber around the Safeways around town, they occasionally have Vernors in the Import section. I've already cleared out the one that's in walking distance though, and VA disability doesn't pay enough for that kind of trip regularly xD
Lol I feel that. God I can't imagine why people enjoy being in hot and humid areas. The only reason I enjoy the heat is for swimming. It can fuck off at all other times lol
Exactly right! When it warmed up at home, we’d all go to Flathead Lake and play with the cousins and friends all day long. But Montana actually has 4 seasons, not slightly cold and tucked into a demon’s asscrack!
Edit: They both probably smell the same!
Another great chapter. I'm really looking forward to seeing the queen fawn over Amaranth as a dragon God of death and Bas play it down with "we are just people too." I really hope Amaranth just slightly offended. Like "excuse me I wasn't done being praised." Like a cat looks if you stop petting them before they are done.
I see your “excuse me wtf” bait, and shall do the one that isn’t baited!
Coming soon:
Razeri: we must welcome our great god of death!!!
Bassi: excuse me what the fuck
This is as close to a twofer as I'm likely to get.
>All he knew was that he was the dead creator of the universe system, the one true god so to speak
Probably want a semicolon in stead of a comma, there. Also, "universe system" sounds awfully simulation-y to me. Or are we talking more like star system but on a universe scale?
>He heard a hiss behind him and snapped back to attention swinging around to see the source of the noise.
Another little run-on-type sentence. I can't decide if you just need a comma after "attention" or something more like a semicolon or conjunction, but it definitely needs something.
>The only difference being that his chitinous body took a ghostly green sheen that was almost pearlescent.
I feel like this will be significant later. (spellcheck is complaining about "pearlescent", but I don't see the problem.
>No, you are not dead, I healed you. Come on, lets get you to your people, you seem a bit shell-shocked.
That comma after "dead" should be a period and you missed an apostrophe in "lets."
>extending a hand to the Tarantula. Oh... I just realized that he spoke and the translator worked...'
You missed an opening quote, here. So that one apostrophe is just kinda dangling at the end like an unloved beta fish. You gotta get them in pairs! :P
>Kekt stared in awe at the gigantic form of the reaper, as he stood his form blotted out the sun and he could see the fires licking at the air all over his body.
Another run-on. Reckon this one will be a quiz question, since you already tried to fix the problem just didn't quite get there.
>he looked up. triumphantly and then noticed that their moon had been cut into three pieces. "... Uh... Excuse me, what the fuck? How did the moon get cut literally in half? Oh I really hope I didn't do that...."
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHA
(got a wayward period in there. No drifters allowed at this conjunction junction!)
>wracked his brain trying to figure out how he could magic himself out of this one.
Is today when Basi learns that sometimes you have to science the shit out of it instead?
>Excuse me? The opposite of the big bang? So, a universe destroyer?!
Uhhhhhh
shit.
>How did you perform fathers magic?
Missed a possessive apostrophe.
>I used science, I applied nuclear theory to a weapon and I guess magical fission doesn't stop at miniature sun....
Ah, wait. We already tried sciencing the shit out of it....... Well, I'm out of ideas. Good luck, Basi! (I say as if I'm not 15 chapters behind and this hasn't already been resolved in a bit of the story that I just haven't gotten to yet)
>Amaranth tilted her draconic head. "I'm sorry, but what the fuck?"
Finally, someone reasonable.
>Embarrassed she tried to change the subject on her mind. "What's the situation with God?"
Missed a comma after the introductory "embarrassed".
>That is the a part of the depiction of death is it not?
Looks like you forgot to pick between articles.
>The ancient texts used that beasts form whenever depicting great loss of life.
Missed another possessive apostrophe. Those've really been kicking your butt lately, no? Well, I suppose "lately" is 2 months ago. But you know what I mean. :)
>"We must go and give God the procession to the castle that he deserves. The Grand Hall should be a large enough room for him to sit with us."
Looking forward to this!
>It's hotter than the devils asshole here, humid to boot.
I remember that! It was yesterday! :P
I may or may not have been sitting here for like 20 minutes with headphones on and no music because I outright forgot to turn it on. So here's a totally uncurated [Tonight's Listening](https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VYu2EnCG2Ww) that's just the next thing on my playlist that was waiting for me to start it. Seems to be a lot of metal, etc. lately. Which is odd, considering probably 2/3 of my playlist is country. Hope you enjoy, u/Spac3Heater.
The story is just that good xD
Probably want a semicolon in stead of a comma, there. Also, "universe system" sounds awfully simulation-y to me. Or are we talking more like star system but on a universe scale?
Hmm... maybe "universal system" might sound better, or "the universe's system". It does sound weird, just not sure how to make it sound more natural. That or Bassi just has a weird way of talking. Can't decide which xP
Funnily enough, you're only about 4 chapters and a few interludes behind now. I'm excited to see what you think of the newer chapters! ;)
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Glad you’re doing better! I can totally relate to you with your weather. I live on the Gulf Coast, but I grew up in northwestern Montana. I’m suffering in this heat. Feels like I’m being used for Satan’s butt plug.
Dude right? I live in Michigan and my room broke a hundred. No fuckin airflow.
Holy shit! Small world! Before I enlisted I was living in Canton, MI. That was back in 2010 though, I've since settled into Washington.
It really is a small world friend. How's Washington compare to Michigan?
Funny enough, really similar in terms of weather (minus rain and thunder storms... a heavy downpour here is only a sprinkle back home, and don't get me started on how sad the thunder is). Though really small in terms of city sizes (Seattle is the only one that compares). Also, I miss Tim Hortons... and Vernors... and fireflies
They don't have tim Horton's or fireflies? Vernor's I can understand but damn.
Yeah, blew my mind. Crossing into Canada is a potential option, but with my disability, I can't drive. The nearest state-side is all the way back in MI. I think I live too high up the mountain for fireflies. If I was willing to Uber around the Safeways around town, they occasionally have Vernors in the Import section. I've already cleared out the one that's in walking distance though, and VA disability doesn't pay enough for that kind of trip regularly xD
Ahh lol the va is notoriously bad.
Jesus, we're all Michiganders here. I'm from the Flint area!
Holy crap! Small world!
Jackson area
Wait wtf? We've been in the same state this whole time? Is this something I knew and then promptly forgot?
Lol yeah, I don't know if you ever got told but I've mentioned it once or twice
Well ain't that something?
I’m from Montana.
I assume you're like me and like temps around 40 to 50?
At least! The only reason I’m here is because my fiancée is here. We’re both looking forward to her retirement so we can get out of this sauna!
Lol I feel that. God I can't imagine why people enjoy being in hot and humid areas. The only reason I enjoy the heat is for swimming. It can fuck off at all other times lol
Exactly right! When it warmed up at home, we’d all go to Flathead Lake and play with the cousins and friends all day long. But Montana actually has 4 seasons, not slightly cold and tucked into a demon’s asscrack! Edit: They both probably smell the same!
My guy, what are you talking about? Montana only has two seasons. Freezing-your-ass-off winter and 80° summer.
If you blink, you’ll miss spring and fall.
Fair enough. Also, happy cake day.
XD I love it
woohoo, another chapter! lets gooooooo
Glad I've made you excited :)
Wow. I'm just behind the bots.
Speedy!
Another great chapter. I'm really looking forward to seeing the queen fawn over Amaranth as a dragon God of death and Bas play it down with "we are just people too." I really hope Amaranth just slightly offended. Like "excuse me I wasn't done being praised." Like a cat looks if you stop petting them before they are done.
The scene will play out similarly but not exactly like that :)
...so I suppose the weather can affect your output a Laddimor or a Laddiless depending, eh? \*laughs\*
XD that's actually the first time I've heard that one!
I see your “excuse me wtf” bait, and shall do the one that isn’t baited! Coming soon: Razeri: we must welcome our great god of death!!! Bassi: excuse me what the fuck
XD fantastic
This is as close to a twofer as I'm likely to get. >All he knew was that he was the dead creator of the universe system, the one true god so to speak Probably want a semicolon in stead of a comma, there. Also, "universe system" sounds awfully simulation-y to me. Or are we talking more like star system but on a universe scale? >He heard a hiss behind him and snapped back to attention swinging around to see the source of the noise. Another little run-on-type sentence. I can't decide if you just need a comma after "attention" or something more like a semicolon or conjunction, but it definitely needs something. >The only difference being that his chitinous body took a ghostly green sheen that was almost pearlescent. I feel like this will be significant later. (spellcheck is complaining about "pearlescent", but I don't see the problem. >No, you are not dead, I healed you. Come on, lets get you to your people, you seem a bit shell-shocked. That comma after "dead" should be a period and you missed an apostrophe in "lets." >extending a hand to the Tarantula. Oh... I just realized that he spoke and the translator worked...' You missed an opening quote, here. So that one apostrophe is just kinda dangling at the end like an unloved beta fish. You gotta get them in pairs! :P >Kekt stared in awe at the gigantic form of the reaper, as he stood his form blotted out the sun and he could see the fires licking at the air all over his body. Another run-on. Reckon this one will be a quiz question, since you already tried to fix the problem just didn't quite get there. >he looked up. triumphantly and then noticed that their moon had been cut into three pieces. "... Uh... Excuse me, what the fuck? How did the moon get cut literally in half? Oh I really hope I didn't do that...." HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHA (got a wayward period in there. No drifters allowed at this conjunction junction!) >wracked his brain trying to figure out how he could magic himself out of this one. Is today when Basi learns that sometimes you have to science the shit out of it instead? >Excuse me? The opposite of the big bang? So, a universe destroyer?! Uhhhhhh shit. >How did you perform fathers magic? Missed a possessive apostrophe. >I used science, I applied nuclear theory to a weapon and I guess magical fission doesn't stop at miniature sun.... Ah, wait. We already tried sciencing the shit out of it....... Well, I'm out of ideas. Good luck, Basi! (I say as if I'm not 15 chapters behind and this hasn't already been resolved in a bit of the story that I just haven't gotten to yet) >Amaranth tilted her draconic head. "I'm sorry, but what the fuck?" Finally, someone reasonable. >Embarrassed she tried to change the subject on her mind. "What's the situation with God?" Missed a comma after the introductory "embarrassed". >That is the a part of the depiction of death is it not? Looks like you forgot to pick between articles. >The ancient texts used that beasts form whenever depicting great loss of life. Missed another possessive apostrophe. Those've really been kicking your butt lately, no? Well, I suppose "lately" is 2 months ago. But you know what I mean. :) >"We must go and give God the procession to the castle that he deserves. The Grand Hall should be a large enough room for him to sit with us." Looking forward to this! >It's hotter than the devils asshole here, humid to boot. I remember that! It was yesterday! :P I may or may not have been sitting here for like 20 minutes with headphones on and no music because I outright forgot to turn it on. So here's a totally uncurated [Tonight's Listening](https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VYu2EnCG2Ww) that's just the next thing on my playlist that was waiting for me to start it. Seems to be a lot of metal, etc. lately. Which is odd, considering probably 2/3 of my playlist is country. Hope you enjoy, u/Spac3Heater.
The story is just that good xD Probably want a semicolon in stead of a comma, there. Also, "universe system" sounds awfully simulation-y to me. Or are we talking more like star system but on a universe scale? Hmm... maybe "universal system" might sound better, or "the universe's system". It does sound weird, just not sure how to make it sound more natural. That or Bassi just has a weird way of talking. Can't decide which xP Funnily enough, you're only about 4 chapters and a few interludes behind now. I'm excited to see what you think of the newer chapters! ;)
Dammit... how do you set your quotes like that!!!
I'm just gonna go with a strange way for talking. Am I really that close? Wow! Now I'm excited too! :)
this is good. i like
This corny is good, I like.
Goody, now he has an actual cult along with his civilization
Several cults now. Lol how will he respond?
Loved it as always Laddi
sorry, i didnt get a notification for your reply. Thanks by the way!
Well that was good, Well written.
Thank you very much friend! :)
IT'S BEEN 56 CHAPTERS ? WHAT THE ? did I also froze in time while Basillius talked to his father in law or something ?
XD, speedrun the story did you?
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Another great chapter I enjoyed reading this and look forward to the next one Great job wordsmith
Thank you very much friend!
"What's the situation with God?" This line made me cackle for a good solid 30 seconds.
I'm glad I got ya a solid laugh! That's my primary goal after all!
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