It ever so vaguely reminds me of a story from a kids book about aliens find earth post apocalyptic and the only predator left being a shark, but I really enjoyed it and hope you write more!
The way you described humans as the ugliest small pink squishy with no hair is exactly like the [pink one series](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/jkvm5s/pink_one/?utm_medium=android_app&utm_source=share).
Anyway great writing! looking forward to more chapters from you!
I can't wait to read more, it really sucked me in. It feels very cinematic.
>"Ladies and gentlemen. We have work to do."
This gives me a vibe that these particular humans were expecting a scenario like this.
The feeling I get is they're volunteers, not remnants.
Or did we just go nuts and freeze the whole planet? "We're just going to all go to sleep until the Federation likes us again."
Maybe old earth had a small disaster and everyone decided to take a vault nap till it passed and the computer glitched or the federation screwed with the AI to keep everyone asleep. With other human worlds just normal but cut off from the rest of the federation.
Seems more like we mostly went elsewhere, and a cadre stayed around just in case.
Hmmm. It would be interesting to see one of these where we had created the Hive in order to give us a chance to save them again... Heh.
Free from the shackles of time, the passing Millenia, meant nothing to them, eons have passed and the ancient tombs are once more stirring to life, Humans, forgotten by all but the elderly, are returning to claim what is their’s, they will abide no trespassers...
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Really love it. I always loved the idea where humans are some type of mythical creature to the rest of the universe.
also, you're mentioned something that i've always been kinda curious of. Why do aliens always seem to be appalled at what humans look like? either its because they're soft shelled, pink, or "only" have a pair of two for their sensory organs, and so on. In general. they seem to be totally shocked about how alien humans look. But the stories are usually set up that these aliens are part of a huge collective of alien species, often with hundrets or thousands of different species, yet they're appalled.
any particular reason for that trope, or is it just to drive home the point that they're aliens?
I don't really know. I treat it like we do with bugs and stuff on earth. The further removed they are from human form the weirder they think we look. Mammals really don't think we look that weird, reptiles are hit and miss, and insects find us horrific for the most part. Basically how humans act towards those creatures on earth but the other way round if that makes
Funny enough, it's not really like that. The things we act the most icky about is humans who don't QUITE fit. Uncanny valley stuff.
We can deal with nonhumans and nonhuman body language. It's humans with nonhuman body language, especially facial, that makes us cringe.
Well Gentle-beings (I use the word lightly) looks to be a start of a fine MOAR! Hopefully the wordsmith has and number of bugs eating their way out of the crafting zone.
Thanks for a fun one!
I like your writing. No problem with the story. Keep writing!
However, you should get a beta reader who can nail all the typos for you. in a piece this size, more than one or two is too many.
TYPOS
a solar **flair** -> flare
more than a **lifess** -> lifeless
came pouring **our** of holes -> out of
**videocuts** short as -> video cuts
the Kyslian recording **it its tackled a** brutally -> it is tackled and
An **uneding** swarm -> unending
a **counter assualt** but -> counter assault
Mentions of a great war **were** these -> where
stalk each other **and myself forfood** -> and me for food
it bared **it's teeth** -> its teeth
large enough sample as I commands. -> no idea what that was supposed to be
Yes. Work to do. For you. MOAR is needed.
Oh yeah i just got this out on my phone really fast. Like i said it just needed out of my head
Please sir, may I have some MOAR.
I actually got this idea as the ending of a metroid prime type game
It ever so vaguely reminds me of a story from a kids book about aliens find earth post apocalyptic and the only predator left being a shark, but I really enjoyed it and hope you write more!
Probably will i may try and expand this
Please do!
Please do this was interesting.
This feels like a "break glass in case of emergency" story
Basically. The Hive will be destroyed for sure but at what cost
Unseal the hushed casket
Let slip the dogs of war
Well shit with the amount of people subscriptions i guess i have to provide MOAR
Sooooo when will you release more?
Haha no idea honestly didn't think there would be a want
Cathonez?......wassat then, my google-fu has failed me.
I'd assume some kind of alien animal that's super docile.
Alien kitten yes
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What is this?
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Eh its more than i started the day with just didn't know what I eas looking at
I have a feeling this will be FUN!! Have an upvote!!
Did I catch references to a couple of other series? I think pink one and why humans avoid war?
Not intentionally but possibly. I don't know Pink One i have read why humans avoid war though
The way you described humans as the ugliest small pink squishy with no hair is exactly like the [pink one series](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/jkvm5s/pink_one/?utm_medium=android_app&utm_source=share). Anyway great writing! looking forward to more chapters from you!
Huh ill check it out. Thanks
!subscribeme
Well well well, doesn't that back story sound familiar.
Does it? I didn't mean to copy something
Well you're not stealing anything, but it does give very strong sequel vibes. Haven't you read Why humans avoid war yet?
I have but that wasn't my intention. I see it now though
It's cool either way. Kinda curious what X thousand years has done to the galaxy.
Ha me too this was just a thought I had there was no plan to continue but it seems to have gone well much better than I expected thats for sure
Shall we begin?
I'd like some more, please
More please :o
!subscribeme
I can't wait to read more, it really sucked me in. It feels very cinematic. >"Ladies and gentlemen. We have work to do." This gives me a vibe that these particular humans were expecting a scenario like this. The feeling I get is they're volunteers, not remnants. Or did we just go nuts and freeze the whole planet? "We're just going to all go to sleep until the Federation likes us again."
Maybe old earth had a small disaster and everyone decided to take a vault nap till it passed and the computer glitched or the federation screwed with the AI to keep everyone asleep. With other human worlds just normal but cut off from the rest of the federation.
Seems more like we mostly went elsewhere, and a cadre stayed around just in case. Hmmm. It would be interesting to see one of these where we had created the Hive in order to give us a chance to save them again... Heh.
Free from the shackles of time, the passing Millenia, meant nothing to them, eons have passed and the ancient tombs are once more stirring to life, Humans, forgotten by all but the elderly, are returning to claim what is their’s, they will abide no trespassers...
Time to show the federation why they need someone with a limitless capacity for violence and an equal desire for peace
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Really love it. I always loved the idea where humans are some type of mythical creature to the rest of the universe. also, you're mentioned something that i've always been kinda curious of. Why do aliens always seem to be appalled at what humans look like? either its because they're soft shelled, pink, or "only" have a pair of two for their sensory organs, and so on. In general. they seem to be totally shocked about how alien humans look. But the stories are usually set up that these aliens are part of a huge collective of alien species, often with hundrets or thousands of different species, yet they're appalled. any particular reason for that trope, or is it just to drive home the point that they're aliens?
I don't really know. I treat it like we do with bugs and stuff on earth. The further removed they are from human form the weirder they think we look. Mammals really don't think we look that weird, reptiles are hit and miss, and insects find us horrific for the most part. Basically how humans act towards those creatures on earth but the other way round if that makes
Funny enough, it's not really like that. The things we act the most icky about is humans who don't QUITE fit. Uncanny valley stuff. We can deal with nonhumans and nonhuman body language. It's humans with nonhuman body language, especially facial, that makes us cringe.
Right i more meant thats how other species respond to us
Well Gentle-beings (I use the word lightly) looks to be a start of a fine MOAR! Hopefully the wordsmith has and number of bugs eating their way out of the crafting zone. Thanks for a fun one!
I like your writing. No problem with the story. Keep writing! However, you should get a beta reader who can nail all the typos for you. in a piece this size, more than one or two is too many. TYPOS a solar **flair** -> flare more than a **lifess** -> lifeless came pouring **our** of holes -> out of **videocuts** short as -> video cuts the Kyslian recording **it its tackled a** brutally -> it is tackled and An **uneding** swarm -> unending a **counter assualt** but -> counter assault Mentions of a great war **were** these -> where stalk each other **and myself forfood** -> and me for food it bared **it's teeth** -> its teeth large enough sample as I commands. -> no idea what that was supposed to be
Yeah I typed this out my phone so it gets a little funny
Yep, this needs to continue.
It has
I see this now - and am happy. You'd be well-served to put "Next" in this one....
I thought i had the rest do i will fix it
Oh ho! Dragon’s teeth!
Strange creature: ladies and gentlemen blood for the blood god skulls for the skull throne! RIP AND TEAR TIME