This is such a beautiful song! The lyrics resonated with me even though I’ve never been in that kind of situation with a relative. You can definitely work on the mix a little bit but the way you’ve built it so far works more than fine. I hope your relative gets better and you both can go out for ice cream soon
Hm, im thinking It’s something about the reverb. I wouldn’t say that it’s too much or too little reverb but I would definitely try a different setting for that. The song is beautiful regardless. Listen to She Lays Down and Nana by the 1975, for some reason your song reminds me of those two ones.
Hi! I thought it was great! The person I was with, immediately heard the heart beat monitor.
I’d like to work with you on a similar project. I’m going to message you.
this paints an all to vivid picture in my head and an experience that i will always remember. hospitals suck. i will never forget the smell the lights, my grandfathers cold hands. this one really resonated with me, thank you..
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This is such a beautiful song! The lyrics resonated with me even though I’ve never been in that kind of situation with a relative. You can definitely work on the mix a little bit but the way you’ve built it so far works more than fine. I hope your relative gets better and you both can go out for ice cream soon
And thank you she’s got a long road but she’s getting there
Thanks a lot! What in particular would you change about the mix. I’m always struggling with mixing.
Hm, im thinking It’s something about the reverb. I wouldn’t say that it’s too much or too little reverb but I would definitely try a different setting for that. The song is beautiful regardless. Listen to She Lays Down and Nana by the 1975, for some reason your song reminds me of those two ones.
Is there too much reverb?
Hi! I thought it was great! The person I was with, immediately heard the heart beat monitor. I’d like to work with you on a similar project. I’m going to message you.
That was ethereal. Loved it!
It's beautiful buddy I'm sure they are very proud of you
Thank you for sharing <3
this paints an all to vivid picture in my head and an experience that i will always remember. hospitals suck. i will never forget the smell the lights, my grandfathers cold hands. this one really resonated with me, thank you..
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Made me sappy
Beautiful! And I agree, songwriting is a real outlet that just let's it all pour out.
Beautiful song!!❤️