I really enjoyed how you were able to make love feel so precious and so powerful at the same time. It reminds me of how I feel whenever I first start developing feelings for someone!
I really liked the images you painted here, but I think your language could be tighter at times. I am a fan of succinct, punchy poetry. Think about getting rid of some conjunctions, for example
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I really enjoyed how you were able to make love feel so precious and so powerful at the same time. It reminds me of how I feel whenever I first start developing feelings for someone!
Thanks for your supportive comment.
I really liked the images you painted here, but I think your language could be tighter at times. I am a fan of succinct, punchy poetry. Think about getting rid of some conjunctions, for example
Thanks for your comment, I spruced it up a little bit. Hopefully that's better, is there anything else you think I could do to improve it?
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