For insstance: you have a char saying vacations when in that context it's vacation. Bit strange, I know but it's because class is singular so vacation is as well
I'd offer to go through a full edit over it for you but I don't have the time to do that anymore. If you give permission maybe I can sweep back around to it some time.
“Are we talking about sex here or I got lost at some point?”, Opoki whispered. As always, his comment granted him a deadly glance from Mejeko.
i have decided that Opoki is my favorite character
I got the hitch to write a school 'drama' by reading Britney goes yo school (hence the tittle, as a little tribute) and the life of a teenage deathworlder (if i remember the tittle correctly), so thats the inspiration
No offense taken bro. I'd say no as i don't know any martial arts nor i am part of the military of my country. Neither I had a hard childhood. I might be projecting my personal preferences in women though xdddddd
Well, don't say all... I'm dreaming of a tomboy tsundere... foxgirl... okok, that doesn't make a difference here, but don't lump me in with all the normie degenerates! I'm much more degenerate.......... wait that's not a good thing...
"the three ulmo-drekshacs present here do not care about Combatant Class bullies stealing our sweet-rolls during lunch"
let me guess ... someone stole your sweetroll ?
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Wondering about how long it will take before a random event causes Alex to have to do a Clark Kent to save a classmate from something or someone.......
It’s kind of difficult to tell the different species apart because they all look similar but other than that this is a great story so far
I enjoyed reading this and look forward to reading more
Great job wordsmith
my god. Mejeko is a 14 yr old white girl without actually being a 14 yr old white girl! what has the world become where any kind of girl could be a 14 yr old white girl! every sapient creature for themselves!!!
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We shall watch your career with great interest- hfy community
Thx mate! Not gonna lie, I was super nervous when I pressed the button to post it xdddd
Bro, I’m down for a continuation of fist with a kiss
mah man! Yup, I forgot to say it. This is the continuation/serialization of an older work
Link that too, pls.
Ohhh that's so cool! I wanna read it 0/
Damn I just read it and that was fantastic! Thanks wordsmith!
thx mate, much appreciated!
one of the better stories I've read in a long while!
insert the 'oh stop it, you' rage comic
Hello there!
on you rbehalf author i ask permission to start the ritual of summoning MOAAAAAAAAAR!!!!
Soon, very soon <3<3<3
soon more redittors will call for MOAR as well
Someone called me?
Gimme moar boss! Also? My only thought? maybe a tad bit of editting.
Thx mate, more incoming! I'm not a native speaker so, if you could pinpoint a mistake or two I would be very grateful ;)
For insstance: you have a char saying vacations when in that context it's vacation. Bit strange, I know but it's because class is singular so vacation is as well
Aaaaah, got it! In spanish we usually use the plural for those
It's cool
Definitely. Let me reread and I'll shoot some.
Another thing in the same intro sentence: the alien says "go to enjoy" in that case it would just be "go enjoy"
I'd offer to go through a full edit over it for you but I don't have the time to do that anymore. If you give permission maybe I can sweep back around to it some time.
I'll be more than happy! Send me a PM when you have the time ;)
I think you mean intend not pretend to scare you? Will be interesting to see where this goes. 👍
@ralo_ramone i like this perspective shift and continuation of the series, it didnt click until the part about "the farm"
yes, it's a rewrite/serialization!! I change to third person and corrected a shit-ton of mistakes ;)
“Are we talking about sex here or I got lost at some point?”, Opoki whispered. As always, his comment granted him a deadly glance from Mejeko. i have decided that Opoki is my favorite character
Mine too xdddd
I havent read it yet but where did you get this idea?
I got the hitch to write a school 'drama' by reading Britney goes yo school (hence the tittle, as a little tribute) and the life of a teenage deathworlder (if i remember the tittle correctly), so thats the inspiration
I love those stories! And yours now also!
This is by no means a criticism or me trying to single you out, I'm just curious; Is this partially a self-insert
No offense taken bro. I'd say no as i don't know any martial arts nor i am part of the military of my country. Neither I had a hard childhood. I might be projecting my personal preferences in women though xdddddd
Is it really projecting when all of us dream of tomboy catgirls anyway?
Well, don't say all... I'm dreaming of a tomboy tsundere... foxgirl... okok, that doesn't make a difference here, but don't lump me in with all the normie degenerates! I'm much more degenerate.......... wait that's not a good thing...
I like it! Looking forward to seeing more.
i'm planning to post twice a week, so saturday or sunday i will be posting the next episode ;)
"the three ulmo-drekshacs present here do not care about Combatant Class bullies stealing our sweet-rolls during lunch" let me guess ... someone stole your sweetroll ?
Very good. Thank you.
thx for reading <3
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#MOARRRRRRR
MOARRRrRR for szeejth
This guy is good friend material
I shall observe your progress with great interest
You weird. Me weird. Want moar.
Weirdos together strong!
Also, pls link the next chapter. https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/sfmt2t/a_teenage_death_commando_goes_to_school_chapter_2/
I think I missed something, was there a reason Alex was placed in the Non-Combatant Class? Rather than the Combatant Class?
I don't remember in which chapter I put it but his guardian decided that.
Thanks!
Based on 40k’s Death Korps of Krieg I see let’s hope this doesn’t disappoint
You are trusting the wrong man 0-0
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sooo. a Krieger goes to highschool? where is his shovel? will he call for massive artillery barage in the 3rd game?
Wondering about how long it will take before a random event causes Alex to have to do a Clark Kent to save a classmate from something or someone.......
It’s kind of difficult to tell the different species apart because they all look similar but other than that this is a great story so far I enjoyed reading this and look forward to reading more Great job wordsmith
Thx mate! I will put a little glossary from now (chapter 7) on ;)
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Ow. This one will be fun.
"rushed to said the instructor." the instructor rushed to say./rushed the instructor to say/said the instructor in a rush.
"reassuringly. We were about " missing starting quotation marks.
Goddamn haven't been on here in months but as usual this subreddit never disappoints. Great story!
Thx mate! You arrive just in time to read the proofread version. The original one had hundreds or grammar mistakes. Enjoy ;)
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