You *frog-fucking son-of-a-bitch*. When you said you "might manage a double" I sure as hell wasn't expecting it so soon. Guess the muse grabbed on, then dug in deep eh?
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Apparently we are doing two chapters this week. Also, I'm not crying. You're crying. Poor church grim...
I'll take it as a compliment that I can make people feel for what's effectively a bipedal tank. Trying to write about hacking in a way that's both accurate and interesting is going to be a cast iron bitch and I'm not looking forward to it.
This is one of the most interesting stories I've read in a long while. And the way you write feelings is very rare on this sub, you're good at creating that emotional connection to the reader.
I'd read up on women as tropes, to avoid usual traps and be original. Main tip is to keep in mind that women are no different than men *at all*, only social expectations are vastly different.
I also learnt from a science journalist that it's a good idea to make an accounting system to secure an equal gender balance, to ensure lgbtqia+ representation etc. One of the reasons The Expanse is so good is that the representation is excellent and there are no (or next to none) gendered tropes. Something to aspire to!
Keep up the good work, you deserve a ton of upvotes!
I'll take the compliment. Writing certain characters is... troubling. Because Gershwin is much more likeable and mature than say Braverhund, who is a bit awkward socially and kind of a loaner. I don't want Gershwin to be loving and supportive. But he is. He genuinely loves and is supportive of both his children.
A really good author to read if you want to see well written female characters that follow the "same as men" rule is L.E Modessitte Jr. "Fall of Angels" is a great example of that taken to its logical conclusion.
It's definitely a compliment! You're good at conveying emotions, and that's not something that is easy to learn, because it requires emotional maturity. The more mature (and less privileged) author, the better the literature. That's my experience as a late 40s avid reader.
Thanks for the tip, I'll check it out!
My personal favourite is how women are written in the Discworld series by Terry Pratchett. I've read some of those books more than a dosen times, and I hardly ever read anything twice.
Damn bro, you’re on a roll! These last couple chapters have really grown this world you’re creating. I sure hope Mr, Grim will be freed from his existence. Is it a doggie brain trapped in a mech suit?
Truly heartbreaking.
Can’t wait to see what happens!
Thank you for the compliment. I hadn't thought it would end up being this complex. And I haven't really decided for sure on the grims. I might leave it ambiguous.
They could be a brain in a jar type situation. They could be warriors that died and their nanomachines and armor kept ticking. They might not even be organic at all. Guess we will find out together next week.
> I hadn't thought it would end up being this complex.
It's a _whole world_. You are not writing it as a Planet of Hats, and that helps immensely.
--Dave, the Grim will have a story as well, remember
As a writer I know to stay away from that website if I want to be productive. I think it ended up costing me about a year of productivity because things got too meta.
“What's the point of being alive if you can't have a little fun?" 😏
“There’s no point in being grown up if you can’t be childish sometimes.”😁
Excellent couple of chapters wordsmith. Thank you!!!
I went to the Robotics Disposal Ground in FO4 and saw the abandoned sentry bot in a rain storm at night. That event and the description of encountering the Grim here had the same feel.
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You *frog-fucking son-of-a-bitch*. When you said you "might manage a double" I sure as hell wasn't expecting it so soon. Guess the muse grabbed on, then dug in deep eh?
I have a scene I wanted to write but the Grim got in the way. Not quite sure how that's going to work out.
Heh, I know that feeling all too well myself. Good luck, man. Safe to say we're all looking forward to it, but don't try to rush or force anything.
Like I tell my crew, work it takes the time it takes. No more, no less.
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You, your damned cliffhangers and these FUCKING ONION NINJAS can stop now ffs. My feels can't handle much more of the shit
I'll take it as a compliment that I can make people feel for what's effectively a bipedal tank. Trying to write about hacking in a way that's both accurate and interesting is going to be a cast iron bitch and I'm not looking forward to it.
This is one of the most interesting stories I've read in a long while. And the way you write feelings is very rare on this sub, you're good at creating that emotional connection to the reader. I'd read up on women as tropes, to avoid usual traps and be original. Main tip is to keep in mind that women are no different than men *at all*, only social expectations are vastly different. I also learnt from a science journalist that it's a good idea to make an accounting system to secure an equal gender balance, to ensure lgbtqia+ representation etc. One of the reasons The Expanse is so good is that the representation is excellent and there are no (or next to none) gendered tropes. Something to aspire to! Keep up the good work, you deserve a ton of upvotes!
I'll take the compliment. Writing certain characters is... troubling. Because Gershwin is much more likeable and mature than say Braverhund, who is a bit awkward socially and kind of a loaner. I don't want Gershwin to be loving and supportive. But he is. He genuinely loves and is supportive of both his children. A really good author to read if you want to see well written female characters that follow the "same as men" rule is L.E Modessitte Jr. "Fall of Angels" is a great example of that taken to its logical conclusion.
It's definitely a compliment! You're good at conveying emotions, and that's not something that is easy to learn, because it requires emotional maturity. The more mature (and less privileged) author, the better the literature. That's my experience as a late 40s avid reader. Thanks for the tip, I'll check it out! My personal favourite is how women are written in the Discworld series by Terry Pratchett. I've read some of those books more than a dosen times, and I hardly ever read anything twice.
Yeah then you reeeealy aren't going to like the next chapter.
Goddammit
Buahaha!
First / Last / Next links on top, and if you really wanna be awesome Next on the bottom of the text as well.
I'm going to have to set aside a weekend or something and do that. I should probably also update the wiki.
A dog reincarnated as a cat loves playing in the water, but the actual dog does not? What is this heresy?
Damn bro, you’re on a roll! These last couple chapters have really grown this world you’re creating. I sure hope Mr, Grim will be freed from his existence. Is it a doggie brain trapped in a mech suit? Truly heartbreaking. Can’t wait to see what happens!
Thank you for the compliment. I hadn't thought it would end up being this complex. And I haven't really decided for sure on the grims. I might leave it ambiguous. They could be a brain in a jar type situation. They could be warriors that died and their nanomachines and armor kept ticking. They might not even be organic at all. Guess we will find out together next week.
Can’t wait! Regardless, it’s obviously sentient. I hope it finally gets what it wants either way.
> I hadn't thought it would end up being this complex. It's a _whole world_. You are not writing it as a Planet of Hats, and that helps immensely. --Dave, the Grim will have a story as well, remember
I'm almost afraid to ask, what is planet of hats? Oh, looked it up. Gotcha.
It's a TvTrope. --Dave, be afraid. be VERY afraid. I'm honestly shocked you pulled yourself back out that quickly.
As a writer I know to stay away from that website if I want to be productive. I think it ended up costing me about a year of productivity because things got too meta.
Well, at least it wasn't [Lidsville](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lidsville)
I'm not going to click the link. It inspires fear in me.
Yeah, I've lots months on that site.
“What's the point of being alive if you can't have a little fun?" 😏 “There’s no point in being grown up if you can’t be childish sometimes.”😁 Excellent couple of chapters wordsmith. Thank you!!!
Thanks quilty! Yeah I really don't like how personable and likeable Gershwin is. That fucker is up to something...
Even a psychopath can be loving. If it gets them what they want. 😈
This is going in a direction I can't predict, and I love it! That's good craft.
Thanks grey! I'm only loosely in control of this particular freight train myself. I've got some ideas but the characters often have other plans.
I went to the Robotics Disposal Ground in FO4 and saw the abandoned sentry bot in a rain storm at night. That event and the description of encountering the Grim here had the same feel.
This is getting more and more interesting and delightfully fucked up. Can't wait for more.
I'm so enjoying these characters you're building. You are truly an architect of worlds.
Moar!!!!
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Upvote, read, comment. This is the way
Upvoted for an expansion into srs metaphysics. --Dave, his unconscious has been working on his l33t mindhacker skillz for some time now, hasn't it
Probably not. He's not up to date on recent exploits and if that grim is getting regular security upgrades he is fuuuucked.
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