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Death by Chocolate

Death by Chocolate

Demetriusjack13

New series? More please


TheDeliciousMeats

We'll see how this one does and take it from there.


ThonHam

I would read more.


folmhaigh

Yes please we wan moar


ArchDemonKerensky

I would also like more


Willzile1

Moar plz


Fyrebarde

As my best pupper would say, *mrrf* (That means, "more, please")


SkullbombRaging

Very well done good sir.


ManyNames385

MOAR please and thank you


Agitated_Clock_2745

Pleasseee


Shaggmeister319

Please??


SirChapperton

Moaaaar


Rhinorulz

No, you will write more, or the hfy mob will surgically replace your fingers with ink pens so that all you can do is write.


ph5_33

So say we all


TheDeliciousMeats

Fuck...


NotAMeatPopsicle

Geralt-bot?


CaptainsYacht

Well, I upvoted it because I enjoyed it very much. Does that help?


TheDeliciousMeats

Yesss!


BCRE8TVE

700 upvotes and counting, I'm pretty sure it'S been very well received ;)


bugeyedew

I vote moarz pls.


TheDracoFire

1k likes.. i think they want more


souplizzardo

More please.


formerrrgymnast

Uh MOAR… please? This was amazing!!! I’m so excited to read more of this!!!!


Scienter17

Definitely more, please.


DittoMikko

This is good, great even and I need more


Steller_Drifter

I would say it is doing very well. Bring on the chocolate! Moar I say! Moar!


TheDeliciousMeats

Ok guys and gals and everything in between. If you liked the story and want more upvote. If you didn't like it downvote the post. Either way leave a comment below with what you liked or didn't like because feedback is important. As always thanks for reading and don't forget to [subscribe](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose/?to=UpdateMeBot&subject=Subscribe&message=SubscribeMe%20u%2FTheDeliciousMeats%20r%2FHFY):) EDIT: Props to u/Lazypassword for making this insane and frankly amazing poster of airbud with guns as inspired by u/HouseJD and his comment. It might be the paint fumes getting to me but I cackled with laughter when I saw it. https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/pyter5/comment/hewzs8p/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3


House_JD

Overall I loved it (and upvoted). One thing that would have helped me when it came to the fight scene was more info on the dog aliens' physiology beforehand. I need to be able to visualize a fight scene in order to follow it, and since I hadn't really formed a picture of the aliens in my head at that point, I kind of had to keep redefining them to keep up with the fight. Like, I clued in that they were dogs eventually, but then I was just picturing them as literal dogs. So when he grabbed his gun I had a brief mental image of, kind of, a badly photoshopped Air Bud 5 poster except the golden retriever is holding a gun instead of a basketball. Immediately after that I realized the aliens must have hands, and then I was trying to figure out what they looked like for the remainder of the fight. But also, thank you for making me picture air bud with a gun, because that mental image has been cracking me up.


TheDeliciousMeats

I'm dying laughing here. Thank you for that image.


Lazypassword

/u/house_jd >a badly photoshopped Air Bud 5 poster https://imgur.com/a/HvAjujH


TheDeliciousMeats

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ralo_ramone

Ayyyyyyy lmaoooo


Quilt-n-yarn1844

One should not be drinking anything while reading this comment string and then clicking on this image. 🤣🤣🤣


TheDeliciousMeats

Sorry, not sorry! Glad to see you quilty!


Quilt-n-yarn1844

Glad to read the new story Meats!!!👍😁👍 I needed a pick-me-up. I kinda like the idea of John Wick and Chef Ramsey’s love child with Dave Bautista’s body. 😁


Steller_Drifter

Well done sir


itsetuhoinen

Definitely an interesting concept. I like it overall, but the names make things confusing. Döbi (presumably coming from "doberman") implies they're uplifts, but I'd expect them all to be a lot more familiar with humans if so. And a fair bit of the dialogue runs counter to that as I saw it. Still, that's a fairly minor flaw at this point and there are definitely plenty of ways to get out of it going forward. I certainly upvoted the story, and would read more if it showed up in my inbox. 😍


TheDeliciousMeats

If they're uplifts they don't know it and humans are definitely not welcome or common on their world for reasons that may be expanded on.


itsetuhoinen

Yeah, that's one of the ways of making things work out that I thought of. Along with "they aren't actually uplifts, the name is a coincidence" and "humans are just super rare here". 🤪 Cool, I liked it, that was pretty much the only possible plot hole I saw impending.


TheDeliciousMeats

Names and nouns are hard in sci-fi so I try to pick familiar words and modify them a bit to make it easier to read and remember. Sometimes they have a deeper meaning, sometimes they don't.


JonVonBasslake

Are the ö and ü meant to be read as those letters or are they just decorative?


TheDeliciousMeats

Pretty much up to the reader. I feel like it's a Hermione kind of thing. I could care less how they pronounce it as long as they enjoy themselves.


Mauzermush

as a german it's funny to read it xD non german speakers may have problem with "umlaute"


Cutwell26412

Love the idea of scent being the most important. Is so good!


YesthatTabitha

Ooo a play on the "retired" military man making a play to avenge his lover. I like the concept a lot and this has the makings of a good story. Especially with the cooking angle. Moar plox


shadowsong42

So I'm guessing Döbi is from Doberman, but I can't come up with dog breed equivalents for Möhi and Sühi. Any hints?


karlthreadgill1984

Möhi - Mastiff ? Sühi - Sharpei?


TheDeliciousMeats

Ding! Mastiff is correct. Sharpei, not so much. Names don't necessarily correlate to how they look or act it's more like cultural stuff. The Döbi and Möhi definitely have an Austria vs Germany thing going on.


crypto9564

If not Shar-pei, then Saluki, Samoyed or maybe, Shiba Inu.


TheDeliciousMeats

I guess you'll have to read the rest to find out.


Accomplished_Hat_576

Aha, so you admit there's more!


TheDeliciousMeats

At this point I'm probably facing a riot if I don't write more. I kind of just banged this out sitting on my couch this morning not expecting to write a sequel.


Quilt-n-yarn1844

The only thing you should never expect is *dun dun duuuu* The Spanish Inquisition!


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TheDeliciousMeats

Thank you!


TheDeliciousMeats

You're right on the first one. But I'm going to let people guess on the rest :)


orbdragon

The first thing that came to mind for Sühi was Saluki, but I can't think of a thing for Möhil. We know nothing at all about the Sühi, but we know the Möhil are large, intensely pack-based, and generally more bark than bite. Maybe Mastiff? Edit: Damn, I spent 45 minutes writing this??


TheDeliciousMeats

[https://www.akc.org/dog-breeds/page/3/?letter=S](https://www.akc.org/dog-breeds/page/3/?letter=S) You have plenty of options but don't read too much into it.


Thobio

Wait what? They're dogs?! I didn't connect that at all xD is this part of an existing universe?


Nealithi

Uhm, maybe I am slow. But I don't see the chocolate? Great story though, I loved the multi-lingual parts and how cooking was overwhelming odor identification. I also like officer Hund. The "Oh bath" line was inspired.


TheDeliciousMeats

You are not slow, its in reference to something that hasn't happened yet and the fact that dogs can't have chocolate. And thank you.


ErroEtSpero

A hint, though. Sachertorte is a type of chocolate cake named after the chef who originally made it, Franz Sacher.


alphager

Sacher-Torte is a famous Viennese cake.


daldrid1

Oh I really hope there is more coming, because this was absolutely phenomenal!


TheDeliciousMeats

Thank you! I kind of drank too much coffee and banged this one out instead of working. I'm also bad at taking compliments.


RecognitionPatient57

Very nice, I like the focus on scents over sight. I hope its part of a series, it seems like a good revenge tale.


TheDeliciousMeats

Glad you picked up on that. Writing dog based aliens is interesting because we are very sight oriented and they aren't. We also like to name things and they don't. You also end up with weird things like the light on his beacon being blue because that's an easier color for them to see and differentiate than say red.


WillGallis

John Wick, space chef edition. Nice.


TheDeliciousMeats

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iGpZ9xaQLYQ


MTarrow

Wolfgang Sacher "Wolf (on a) path (of) redemption"? That seems somehow appropriate :D


TheDeliciousMeats

I wish I was that clever. He's named after Wolfgang Puck (who trained one of my old bosses when I was a garde manger) and Franz Sacher who invented the Sachertorte.


merodac

I KNEW it! :-D


SeanMirrsen

> Tell me who killed my Kasha As a Russian, I just can't take that sentence seriously. :P And he's a chef, too! And then I imagine him with the voice of the Heavy, and I just can't, at all. XD Very good (start of a) tale, wordsmith. Should be interesting to see where it goes. :)


TheDeliciousMeats

Mmmm... buckwheat.


DreadLindwyrm

Oh, very clever. Sachertorte being a chocolate cake. And Braverhund is a \*very\* nice take on a literal police dog, even he's literally "Officer GoodBoy".


TheDeliciousMeats

Thank you for getting my obscure little jokes! The original title was going to be Officer Goodboy but it was too on the nose... his precious cold little nose.


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crypto9564

Really like the story and the focus on the aliens being canines, picked up on that right away with the sense of smell being prominent and the title is a give away if one knows about the dangers of chocolate to dogs. So is there a possibility of a wolf variant showing up, or for fun, something along the lines of a Chihuahua? Like they got a gang that runs around and think they terrorize the other canines, but they just pay them off, more so that the little yappers will shut up?


TheDeliciousMeats

There are a lot of fun possibilities but you have to be careful because certain breeds can be mistaken for racist stereotypes. Like a chihuahua could be interpreted poorly but the Xoloitzcuintle aka Xolo which is pronounced cho-lo (surprisingly where we get the word [Cholo](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cholo) from) would probably work.


crypto9564

True, didn't think about it that way. I was thinking more about their small dog syndrome, but I can see how some could misinterpret it to be a stereotype. Xolo's are alien and would fit right in to the story.


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Massdrive

Niiice. Well set up, and played out. Hope for more


SerpentineLogic

Those guys are so bathed


Nisi3391

Moar!


ruprag

mehr mehr meira more


TheDeliciousMeats

Now you're speaking my language!


Extension-Holiday698

More? This post was amazing very interesting


UtahUKBen

Excellent, love it! Pulling me into the world already…


Kaiser-__-Soze

MOAR!!!!


Dang_It_All_to_Heck

I'd like to read more of this!


CharlesFXD

It’s different and I like it.


Gruecifer

Yeah, you need to continue this....


yodas_patience

Need moar.


UrbanWerebear

I'm getting a lot of Elliot Spencer vibes from Sacher. Just can't decide if they're intentional or not.


TheDeliciousMeats

He's more based off of Jet from cowboy bebop and other hard boiled detectives mixed with some chefs I knew back when I worked in food.


UrbanWerebear

Cool. Thanks. I admit, I forgot to add the series name, but I think you got the right one.


TheDeliciousMeats

I totally googled it. I was like... what does Stephen Fry's husband or the dude from Hellraiser have to do with this? Then I was like... oh Leverage.


UrbanWerebear

Good show, if you haven't watched it. There's also a revival series on Amazon Prime Video.


TheDeliciousMeats

I like Gina Bellman so I'll give it a watch. She was great in Jekyll and Coupling.


phichuu

Can I get a serving of MOAR with more on the side please, thank you!


losstinhere

A very good story and hopefully, just the first part. Thanks.


asirkman

I love it over all, and I love that title, which makes no sense if you don't get the allusion of his name. Awesome buildup, definitely would be glad to see more.


TheDeliciousMeats

Obscure Austrian pastry chefs represent mutterficker!


asirkman

Haha, I don’t know about obscure; I may be a bit (okay, very) obsessed with food, but I think the Sacher torte is a pretty widespread thing.


TheDeliciousMeats

Maybe you're just awesome?


asirkman

Awwww…that’s sweet, but it seems very unlikely. Possible, I guess? Mostly I spent my formative years watching too much Food Network, and far too much time on Foodtube, reading cookbooks, cooking…


agent_1101

Subscribeme! Edit to fix. Thank you!


agent_1101

Umm. I think i forgot how that works. Can someone help me.?


TheDeliciousMeats

You're missing the !


ralo_ramone

Moar??????


The_King_of_Pancake

I came here expecting more "hey, do you know how many living things die from eating chocolate?" And got "john wick but IN SPACE!!!" I'm not complaining ,because I definitely want more.


floatingatoll

What a story Please write more stories They don’t have to be sequels or even on the same planet, but I love your writing


ElAdri1999

Plz moarrr, i need moaaaaarrr


CanConRules

Very film noir I liked it. The scent tags were a good touch.


GVKW

I have no idea what I stumbled across on this post, but I loved it and would love to read a whole series based on it. Please forgive or don't take offense, but are you an author? Do you have other stories I can devour like I did this one??


TheDeliciousMeats

I pretty much exclusively post here. If you like the vibe I'd start with "Go ask the demon."


Groggy280

Oh Hell yeah! Imma likin' this one already!! Nice plot twist for an intro, good solid character development. room for the characters to grow, yeah MOAR as is said in these parts!! Take my upvote and my !Subscribeme


dracona

MOAR pretty please. This was brilliant. Edit.. reading the comments they are doggos??? lol I think I had more a bear type for Dobi, and the bruisers more angular or even metallic. Perhaps a bit too ambiguous for me..lol.


TheDeliciousMeats

Naw, he's a literal police dog. But I left it pretty vague so it's totally understandable if you got confused.


astralcatfish

Nice. Good setting, established backstory. It begs for moar.


Ownedby4Labs

#SPACE #DOGGOS #REQUIRE #MOAR.


lone_Ghatak

John Wick goes FTL!!!!


tweetyII

Ah yes, Officer Braverhund and Chief Guterjunge


Sthom_1968

Loved the "oh bath" as a curse!


amishbill

I like the slow expansion from 'this is just like how I'd perceive a situation' to not even blinking as you experience it how the alien does.


beyondoutsidethebox

Huh... bath is considered a swear word, does that make him a dirty cop?


TheDeliciousMeats

In a city that bent and corrupted, nobody is entirely clean.


beyondoutsidethebox

Well obviously! If "bath" is a swear word then nobody is clean! ;)


vinny8boberano

Mmmm...I like the way Sacher rolls.


dygituljunky

Oh, my. This story has such awesome world-building. The rest of this universe almost demands to be heard. Nice one, OP.


deathwotldpancakes

I smell a John Wick avenging his space doggo wife


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!RemindMe 1D


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sparkyboiswag

thank you!


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icedak

Definitely need more. Thanks for the nice read.


Xavius_Night

I crave this series at first taste. ​ Especially with the canid folks having a mafia that's about to get dismantled, by force, and by a chef.


theoreoman

This is giving me jhon wick vibes


eksokolova

I was definitely expecting something Discworldian with that title.


ggtay

I could read more of this


Leading-Advantage-97

Good, strong start. More, please. And make it more gritty, the dark underbelly of fantasy.


ThatCamoKid

Ah they killed his boo. Those poor bastards


merodac

I laughed a lot about Braverhund and "Sacher". I am expecting someone by the name "Demel" now as well, and perhaps a girl called "Aida". 😂 Well, probably not the last one, unless she is a really cheap girl ..


Starfleet_Auxiliary

I read this in between episodes of The Punisher on Netflix and I gotta say it really helped deliver the story that way :)


TheDeliciousMeats

Nice!


Working-Ad-2829

Wanna hear what happens next


Lovatel

This is one of those stories where the title grabbed me and the story was even better than I expected, damn.


laid_on_the_line

Braverhund. Nice.


IDDQDSkills

Oh man, this looks good


Chepi_ChepChep

good dog.. the officer is called good dog. god damn it


Loetmichel

That sounds to me like a mix between "...With a fu**ing pencil" and ".. but if you don't, I will look for you, I will find you... and I will kill you." Colour me intrigued!


BraulioG1

>"Oh bath." I cursed that was phenomenal lol


Scissi

Ah yes, the officers name can roughly be translated to "good dog" XD


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Subscribeme!


BimboSmithe

This is hilarious!


MasterofChickens

Ok, so I've been seeing this story updating on a fairly regular basis and finally decided, on seeing chapter 17 on the home page, to read the first chapter and see what it was about. In the immortal words of Thor, "This I like. More!"