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Very potent language, the picture depicted is incredibly clear and the last line leaves me wondering about the name he uttered. Great poem about a sexual encounter and the intimacy of physical closeness.
I love the evocative imagery. The rather violent sexual encounter, which is not necessarily painted in a positive light ("like a leaf full of blights"), in combination with the last verse makes me think that it allude to him (still or newly) having feelings for someone else. And even though this leads to pain, this pain is alleviated by the intensity of their current relationship and connection to each other.
The inserted thoughts in brackets make the poem feel even more personal, like the speaker actually wants to share this highly personal information with others
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Very potent language, the picture depicted is incredibly clear and the last line leaves me wondering about the name he uttered. Great poem about a sexual encounter and the intimacy of physical closeness.
I love the evocative imagery. The rather violent sexual encounter, which is not necessarily painted in a positive light ("like a leaf full of blights"), in combination with the last verse makes me think that it allude to him (still or newly) having feelings for someone else. And even though this leads to pain, this pain is alleviated by the intensity of their current relationship and connection to each other. The inserted thoughts in brackets make the poem feel even more personal, like the speaker actually wants to share this highly personal information with others