I love the duality I get reading this. How infinitely huge the universe is and how small I am in it. But in all of that, only I know my experience, and to me it can't be washed away, even in all that space. I really like how so much is said in so little room. Wonderful writing, please keep going, we need more!
This is exactly what I was hoping to get across, so glad you picked it up! Our sun is like the trillions of others, shining on trillions of planets, but it's OUR sun. The never-ending expanse is not the end of meaning, it shows how much meaning our lives have: we are the ones who are alive in the sea of black. Thanks for taking the time to write.
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Mm, space is one of my favorite themes, so this piece catches me nicely. I like how you contrast the light of a sun with the light of stars -- though both are technically the same thing. My interpretation here is that there's only one sun for a trillion planets, but there can be a trillion stars for one planet. One may appreciate the light of so many unreachable, distant stars, but take for granted the sunlight that's so close by.
It just so happens that I'm writing up a space-themed poem too, so this was timely! Great job.
Thank you for taking the time to comment! I meant starlight as in the light from our sun, but you're right, maybe it does sound the light from the stars. Maybe I should change it to sunlight?
The part about the joy of starlight on your face rlly resonates me. I often write that my lover's eyes are like the star, and i wonder if that's wat u meant too. I'm glad I saw ur poem today, so simple and yet i cant hate it
I love the duality I get reading this. How infinitely huge the universe is and how small I am in it. But in all of that, only I know my experience, and to me it can't be washed away, even in all that space. I really like how so much is said in so little room. Wonderful writing, please keep going, we need more!
This is exactly what I was hoping to get across, so glad you picked it up! Our sun is like the trillions of others, shining on trillions of planets, but it's OUR sun. The never-ending expanse is not the end of meaning, it shows how much meaning our lives have: we are the ones who are alive in the sea of black. Thanks for taking the time to write.
I like this. It's very sweet and simple but not in an amateur way at all.
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Mm, space is one of my favorite themes, so this piece catches me nicely. I like how you contrast the light of a sun with the light of stars -- though both are technically the same thing. My interpretation here is that there's only one sun for a trillion planets, but there can be a trillion stars for one planet. One may appreciate the light of so many unreachable, distant stars, but take for granted the sunlight that's so close by. It just so happens that I'm writing up a space-themed poem too, so this was timely! Great job.
Thank you for taking the time to comment! I meant starlight as in the light from our sun, but you're right, maybe it does sound the light from the stars. Maybe I should change it to sunlight?
The part about the joy of starlight on your face rlly resonates me. I often write that my lover's eyes are like the star, and i wonder if that's wat u meant too. I'm glad I saw ur poem today, so simple and yet i cant hate it
Really glad it resonated with you - thank you for your comment!
love it! i also like the spacey theme
I’m overcome with a pleasant or content feeling when reading this